This sequence of poems was inspired by the yesterday’s cloud pictures. You can see them here.
If this rhyming scheme has a name I’d love to know what it is ๐
Night creeps,
Seeps through veils of blue,
You watch white wisps flow,
Blow across fading sky,
Die in the darkening west,
Rest.
*
Sun sinks,
Inks in the night,
Light from stars falls,
Palls in moonbeams,
Dreams unfold,
Gold and silver apples,
Dapples of light and shade,
Fade.
*
Evening sky darkens,
Harkens the ear to the song,
Long and sweet of the thrush.
Hush the earth, the rustling leaves,
Weaves its twilight patterns spangled,
Tangled in your hair, the day dies,
Lies in shadowy tatters deep,
Sleep.
Jane Dougherty Writes 
lovely
Thanks Martie ๐ I like the effect of the rhymes in this one.
I love this one, unusual rhyming pattern but don’t know if it has a name ๐
Thanks! I’m pleased with effect of the run-ons, even if it doesn’t have a name ๐
It sounds like a Van Gogh, aerial spins.
Or Catherine wheels maybe. But slow.I take that as an immense compliment by the way. Thank you ๐
We shall name it the ‘Jane Method.’
Until somebody puts us straight ๐
That sounds about right. ๐
Jane. I think your poem is one of your best ones. I love it. You use slant rhyme beautiful – flow/blow, rest/west, etc, and you use alliteration very well (I think it’s called this) ‘watch white wisps’.
Thank you Kathy. I did like the way the phrases flowed into one another, whatever it’s called.
I love what you’ve done with the rhyming sounds. Gives it a little catch, a syncopated feeling as the ear dwells on the repeated sound with each new line.
I’m glad you think it works. It’s just the way it came out ๐
Makes me want to try it!
Do!