Welcome to the second poetry challenge. Since everybody seemed to have fun with the sept form last week, we’ll give it another go.
Remember (or if you didn’t see last week’s post) the form is seven lines in the syllable pattern, 1-2-3-4-3-2-1.
The theme for this week, as you have probably gathered, is swans, any aspect or association, or inspired by the painting by Walter Leistikow
Please join in in flocks, and leave your sept creations in the comments or as links to your blog post.
Swans
Rising
From the lake
In winged glory
Mist glimmer
Sorrow
Fled.
Im getting a ‘Children of Lir’ Vibe here Jane, I know next to nothing about poetry, but this looks like fun 🙂
You wouldn’t believe how long I’ve been looking for a painting with four swans in it! If you have one, feel free to send it in and Ali and I will write the poems 🙂
I might have some photos? If not ill shoot one for you, before they all migrate for the winter 🙂
Ooh thanks! I should have specified ‘photos’. I didn’t expect you to set up your easel for a few days by a lake on the off chance… Jane Dougherty https://janedougherty.wordpress.com/ The Green Woman
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Ha,Ha, You would be hard pressed to get me with a brush in hand, but a camera, I always have one in my pocket, just in case. Just downloaded the link now. Going to brew a coffee and give it a read,
Thanks Jane 🙂
Here is mine: https://peterbouchier.wordpress.com/english-essays-and-poems-2/tuonela/
Thanks, Peter for starting off the challenge.
Thank you, for the alliterative comment on my post.
Lets try it again:
Swan King of the birds
Graceful and gracious
As couple together
Only death can separate you
Your children fervently defend
Oh beautyful birds
Will we People ever be like you?
Thank you! If you don’t mind, I’ll publish this verse and a reduced one that fits the sept metre. How about this:
Swans
Graceful
Together
Until death parts
Brood-guarding
Beauties
Trust.
That is beautyful, i didn’t kwow how to do it for the sept metre many thanks jane!
It’s a question of syllables. The first line is a a single syllable, second line two syllables, third line three, fourth line four, then it diminishes—fifth line three syllables, sixth line two syllables, and the seventh line a single syllable again. I didn’t explain it very well the first time 🙂
Thanks that you explain it jane, so i learn from it. You challence me to do something different on internet.
This is completely New for me.
Also i learn better english!
It’s the kind of exercise that should come easily to a native speaker with a reasonable vocabulary. For you it will be a real ‘challenge’. You have to be able to hear how the words sound as well as knowing what they look like. I admire you having a go at this. The poems you produce are very pretty.
Thanks jane, never to old to learn something.
Thanks for the prompt Jane and have had a bash.. https://smorgasbordinvitation.wordpress.com/2015/10/21/poetry-challenge-swans-via-jane-dougherty/
Great! The more the merrier!
Poem fits the early morning lift off at the lake. (Intrigued by your comment about looking for 4 swans in an image. Maybe be difficult to find 4 swans in a painting as artists usually prefer 3 or odd numbers for compositions?)
It’s for the four children of Lir. If you have any Irish background you know the story off by heart, and possibly more than one version of it 🙂
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Need to get more back to my roots – must look into that story.
Most of the versions of the story end with the spell being broken when the swan children are baptised. Another version has the baptism being incidental and the breaking of the spell comes when a king from the north marries a queen from the south.
Swan story – I do know a story something like that. Thanks. Will read more
Thank you for the challenge, Jane.
glide
Cygnus
your beauty
and elegance
reflected
in your
grace
https://rivrvlogr.wordpress.com/2015/10/21/cygnus/
Thank you! Swans bring out some of the most lyrical poetry 🙂
Hi, Jane, here is my contribution to the challenge: http://suburbanhobo.com/2015/10/21/poetry-challenge-swans-and-ugly-duckling/
thanks for doing this!
Thank you for participating 🙂 (and for following)
Swans at Dusk
hand
cross brow
shade the eyes
aid sight’s struggle
to capture
nature’s
lift
http://elusivetrope.com/2015/10/21/swans-at-dusk/
Thank you!
Here’s mine… and guess the subject?
The Dream of Óengus Óg
Fly
Swan-maid
Dream lover
Lift up my heart
On soft wings
Whilst I
Die
Cheerful, huh?
Couldn’t have put it cheerier myself 🙂
Wings
Caress
The soft light
Of sun on sea,
Fluttering,
Flying,
Free.
Thanks for the challenge Jane- you’re always inspiring.
Lovely sept! Thanks for participating and helping to keep the standard so high.
Swans
Jet black
Harbingers
Of my sorrow
Fly away
Leave me
Be
A picture poem—spectacular! Thank you 🙂
Aww. This is what they do w the long necks. Lovely.
Gorgeous, aren”t they? As long as you don’t rub their feathers up the wrong way.
Sun
Shadows
Under wing
Swans day begins
Over sea
Then land
Free
Gorgeous! Thank you.
I traced The Sept from (J Lapis who found the form at Doug’s …Elusive Trope) to you.
Is this a form you created?
I have fun with short forms (though my icon goes to my long verse site).
I’ll see if I can go back and find your ‘last week’ prompt.
It’s a neat form for a short poem, but I didn’t create it, nor did Doug, as far as I know.
This is the first prompt
and I put all then entries into this post
I hope you join in this week 🙂
I did find the that first post 🙂 And that combo post in my wanderings.
My short verse place is:
https://julesgemstonepages.wordpress.com/
I’ve been playing with haiku and other short forms, but recently with the Trinet. And I like American Lunes (directions on my poetry forms page). Lots of fun new forms to be found on this site/page too: https://mindlovemiserysmenagerie.wordpress.com/2015/10/24/bps-shadorma-and-beyond-loop-poetry-october-24-2015/
Thanks for getting back to me. I’ll save the Oct 10 link. Thank you. I’ll see what I can do.
Thanks for the links 🙂 I thought for a moment I’d discovered that the form I enjoy using is called a loop poem—but it isn’t. Close, but not quite. If you’re looking for challenges you could try a circular poem (I don’t know if it has a technical name) where the last word of the line rhymes with the first word of the next line, and so on until you repeat the first line you started with. No particular line length or number of lines required, just that you end up where you started from.
Margo also has interesting information:
http://margoroby.com/
I’ve known her for about 5-7 years now. But you know net time is different than real time 😉
Thanks! Just had a look. Might write a tanka or two now… Jane Dougherty https://janedougherty.wordpress.com/ The Green Woman
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OK I’ll have a look see.
I don’t usually send or enter anything that requires money. But I didn’t read the link… Good luck.
I learned American haiku, tanka and renga. The traditional Japanese styles I have been told are a tad more complex than just counting syllables. But I don’t worry too much as I write what and how I like. I’m a rebel that way 😉
I won’t be entering anything. Just writing. I’ll send poems to magazines but I’m not interested in entering competitions.
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Surprise:
https://darklightharbor.wordpress.com/2015/10/25/white-winged-embrace/
Here is my offering on The Sept for Swans: [Great Prompt]
http://thesecretkeeper.net/2015/10/25/poetry-challenge-the-sept-2-swans/
HAPPY ENDING
Hush
Dear one
Dry those eyes
Ugly ducklings
Turn into
Graceful
Swans
That’s a beauty! I’ll post it separately or it might not be seen.
That’s very kind and thoughtful of you, Jane. Thank you. 🙂
Thank you for joining in. I appreciate it 🙂
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Somehow I missed this prompt. I’m woefully out of “sept” it seems. Anyhow. Here’s my Swan Sept: https://kmmyrman.wordpress.com/2015/10/28/swansa-warning/