Poetry challenge #15: Shadorma

Here’s one I haven’t tried on you yet, just tested it myself the day before yesterday. It’s a neat form of six line stanzas using the syllable pattern 3/5/3/3/7/5. There’s no rhyme required but you can add as many stanzas as you like.

Here’s my shadorma sequence.

The painting is called City of Dreams by ©Matteo Da Vinci

City_of_dreams_by_matteo_da_vinci

Go to sleep,

The sleep of the just,

Turn your back

On the pain,

Wake to find the deed is done,

Decision taken.

 

Parting’s hard,

Too hard for the weak.

You would stay,

Live with tears,

Easier far to pretend,

Than face the chasm.

 

Pack my hopes

In a feather bag,

Sleep your sleep,

Dream your dream.

When you wake I’ll be long gone,

Winging to the sun.

 

If you would like to use the splendid painting as inspiration, please do. Post your creations in the comments box and leave a link to your blog. You have a week to produce something fabulous. Go!

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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

34 thoughts on “Poetry challenge #15: Shadorma”

  1. I quite liked your example shadorma and the other submissions already in…a bit daunting—but I like the form and have been wanting to try it…so I will or hope to 🙂

  2. I would say that of all the forms with which I’ve worked over the last months, the Shadorma is my favorite. Even at one stanza there is a length to it that allows a little more breathing room (speaking for myself, of course) than say a haiku, at the same time it has a contained rhythm that resonates with me. Maybe it is the beginning which is 3-5-3-3, which forces an economy of words in getting to the image, while the ending 7-5 allows for a more drawn out thought. Of course, it’s allowance of multiple stanzas allows one to explore various facets of something if the mind should go that way.

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