Photo ©Audrey
Rose turns its face to find the sun,
Curved pale petals catch the rain,
Sundered two who were once one,
Sweet petals cup an endless pain.
Rain the cold, unfeeling balm,
That soothes and scars and bites so deep,
The storm that blows away the calm,
Ransacks the place where roses weep.
Rose turns away from winter frost,
And sheds its scent, though none comes near,
For all the summer love that’s lost,
The blackbirds’ songs that none will hear.
So sad. I love “The storm that blows away the calm,/ Ransacks the place where roses weep.”
Thank you Merril 🙂
Date: Thu, 25 Feb 2016 22:53:58 +0000 To: jane.dougherty@dbmail.com
‘The blackbirds’ songs that none will hear.’ – perfect ending. The poet will hear 🙂
Thanks Laine. That’s what I think too 🙂
so poignant so sad – I love the way you effortlessly write rhyming poetry – I didn’t notice it until the 2nd read through!
Now that IS a compliment. Not to notice the rhymes means they weren’t too obtrusive. Thank you!
Date: Fri, 26 Feb 2016 13:28:54 +0000 To: jane.dougherty@dbmail.com
Poignant words with the perfect photo.
Thank you Don:)
A bitter sweetness.
The best kind of sweetness. In poetry anyway.
Date: Sat, 27 Feb 2016 19:29:40 +0000 To: jane.dougherty@dbmail.com
But what about the sappy “roses are red” ones? 😀
They’re sappy.
Date: Sat, 27 Feb 2016 19:58:35 +0000 To: jane.dougherty@dbmail.com
Ha! That they are.
Sweet poems need a few kicks in the head and ruptured spleens or they risk being just…sappy 🙂
Date: Sat, 27 Feb 2016 21:24:45 +0000 To: jane.dougherty@dbmail.com
I thought it was the swift kicks and ruptured spleens that made them sappy. Or is that just bloody?
Sappy is when they ignore the kicks in the head and pretend it’s happening in another poem.