Microfiction: The visit

The Carrot Ranch prompt is on the theme of looking round a property of some kind. In exactly 99 words, here’s my story.



“It’s certainly isolated,” he said approvingly.

“Exactly what we’re looking for,” she agreed. “And the garden! It’s gorgeous.”

They wandered through tangles of roses along mossy brick paths and the scent of honeysuckle, hardly noticing the passing time.

“Estate agent’s running late,” he said, “I’ll give him a call.” He gave up after a few futile attempts. “No signal.”

She hugged herself, suddenly cold. The sun had set. He pointed.

“That must be him!”

She looked in the direction of his pointing finger. A black silhouette striding. Something was not quite…Her hand flew to her mouth.

“Oh my God!”

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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

36 thoughts on “Microfiction: The visit”

  1. Haha love the comments on the REA almost as much as the prose. Any excuse for honeysuckle. Beautiful little piece x

  2. Oh dear! Has her ex-husband turned up? That’s going to cause an unholy row!
    Sorry, Jane. I just had to come up with a different interpretation! You did a marvelous job of scaring us all.

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