I’m giving this idea another spin this week, a painting and a handful of words as a prompt. Please post a link to your poem in the comments. You have a week to produce a masterpiece.
The words you might like to use are:
Tears, horizon, fly, hue, stealing.
The painting (charcoal drawing actually) is by Odilon Redon, entitled ‘Tears’.
This is what I came up with.
Do I hear music in the light,
Stealing over the pale horizon,
Pearling the dawn with dreamlike hues?
Or is it the just the careless sound
Of your bright, parting laughter?
Could I fly, I would,
And follow where you drift,
But tears weigh heavy as lead,
Tying me with dull grey cords
To the dusky shreds of night.
40 thoughts on “Poetry challenge #29: Tears”
Beautiful compilation. There is a haunting melody in this composition that makes me want to sing along. Parting is such sweet sorry, said the bard. You brought it out brilliantly in your poetry.
Thank you! If you feel inspired, do please play along.
I wrote a poem called “Flight” to ring in 2016 and it uses some of the same words but the theme is vastly different. Mine is about facing challenges through focus and hard work. I was really drawn to your poem because of the difference and of course, because of your masterful presentation. Warm wishes for Wednesday.
Thank you for the encouraging words 🙂 Have a great week!
Unintentionally, this is a splendid prompt for today. In the Netherlands, May 4 is National Memorial Day for those who fell for our freedom during World War II (and before, and after). At 8.00PM everyone is silent for two minutes in respect. My entry is a tribute.
Missing NaPoWriMo a bit, so thought I’d join in here. https://wordpress.com/post/fmmewritespoems.wordpress.com/379
I’m not entirely sure what I’ve written. It certainly wasn’t what I expected!
I hope it’s OK to just join in?
Please do! I’d love to read it. I’m not sure what’s happened with the links you left but they’re not to a post. Did you post on your blog? The usual thing is to make a blog post with your poem and post the link in the comments on my challenge post.
Hoping that is it! The wifi is coming at me through treacle today.
That came through loud and clear. Thank you! It’s a beauty.
Thank you! Lovely prompt, enjoyed it very much.
I’m glad! I enjoy visual prompts too.
Thank you for another interesting challenge, Jane. I found the drawing to be very compelling.
I gave it a try. I like yours, it’s much lighter than mine:) Tell me what you think. Mine feels a little gloomy…but so is the picture I think. Anyway, it was fun:)
I didn’t find it gloomy at all. It’s like life, it has its ups and downs. The flock of birds made it hopeful for me 🙂
Oh good, I was afraid it was too gloomy:)
It couldn’t be ‘too’ gloomy ever. It’s your vision and not for anyone else to judge 🙂
Here’s mine. 🙂 https://merrildsmith.wordpress.com/2016/05/04/immutable-tears/
That painting is very powerful, maybe because it’s so close up and in his face. He doesn’t care though. His grief is too overwhelming. He’s in such pain. Although I don’t like to see people suffering, I really love this picture. Its very moving.
I’ll also try and write a poem. 😁
I hope you do. It is a moving portrait. You’re right, he seems so sad and he has such a gentle face.
I think I missed a couple of challenges with NaPoWriMo. But here’s one for this week. Thanks, Jane!
I expected you’d be flapping by for this one 🙂 Nice to have you back.
A free verse inspired by mythology…and your prompts, of course! – Kat
Thank you for putting together this challenge, Jane. I enjoyed reading the entries from the many talented poets. Here’s my offering: https://blog.triciadrammeh.com/2016/05/07/poetry-challenge-tears/
I’m glad you participated, Tricia. It’s a lovely poem.
Hi Jane, summer showers HERE stole the power HERE n So taking a toll on my posts too…I cudnt download the image yet…So just used the words…
Here’s a san san too
Hi Jane, here’s complete combo in a Limerick