Poetry challenge #29: Tears

I’m giving this idea another spin this week, a painting and a handful of words as a prompt. Please post a link to your poem in the comments. You have a week to produce a masterpiece.

The words you might like to use are:

Tears, horizon, fly, hue, stealing.

The painting (charcoal drawing actually) is by Odilon Redon, entitled ‘Tears’.

794px-Odilon_Redon_-_Tears_(Les_Pleurs)_-_Google_Art_Project

This is what I came up with.

Flight

 

Do I hear music in the light,

Stealing over the pale horizon,

Pearling the dawn with dreamlike hues?

Or is it the just the careless sound

Of your bright, parting laughter?

Could I fly, I would,

And follow where you drift,

But tears weigh heavy as lead,

Tying me with dull grey cords

To the dusky shreds of night.

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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

40 thoughts on “Poetry challenge #29: Tears”

  1. Beautiful compilation. There is a haunting melody in this composition that makes me want to sing along. Parting is such sweet sorry, said the bard. You brought it out brilliantly in your poetry.

      1. I wrote a poem called “Flight” to ring in 2016 and it uses some of the same words but the theme is vastly different. Mine is about facing challenges through focus and hard work. I was really drawn to your poem because of the difference and of course, because of your masterful presentation. Warm wishes for Wednesday.

    1. Please do! I’d love to read it. I’m not sure what’s happened with the links you left but they’re not to a post. Did you post on your blog? The usual thing is to make a blog post with your poem and post the link in the comments on my challenge post.

  2. That painting is very powerful, maybe because it’s so close up and in his face. He doesn’t care though. His grief is too overwhelming. He’s in such pain. Although I don’t like to see people suffering, I really love this picture. Its very moving.

    I’ll also try and write a poem. ๐Ÿ˜

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