Poetry challenge Peacock Garden: the entries

This painting seemed to fascinate you all as much as it did me, and the poems it produced are magical.

First in was from Sarah in the South West, setting the misty, dream-like tone.

The Night Garden | fmme writes poems

 

Next is from TJ in Australia/Paris, who has adapted the word suggestion to a thoughtful, melancholic poem inspired by an exotic-looking flower

Life is Fleeting | La vie est trop courte pour boire du mauvais vin

 

Kerfe’s poem has the mystery of the peacock garden and some of the harshness of the peacock’s cry with mythological references that I have always found cold and heartless.

Secret Garden | method two madness

 

Kat Myrman’s poem is a story, magical and strange, focusing on the woman and her motivation. A nice shift in perspective.

Peahen Impostor  | like mercury colliding…

 

Pat in her Jazzy Tower has composed a string of haiku, all bright and polished, and happy! Again, another different view of the peacock theme, this one very much in the sunlight.

https://thoughtsandentanglements.wordpress.com/2016/05/12/haiku-compilation/

 

Merril’s quatern is as she says, romantic and ballad-style, and definitely on the twilight side of the imagination. Lovely trip into myth and magic.

Dusk in the Peacock Garden | Yesterday and today: Merril’s historical musings

 

Sue Vincent’s poem is pure mystical, metaphysical, and surreal. I’d call it haunting if it wasn’t such a hackneyed phrase. Read it and you’ll see what I mean.

Peacock garden | Sue Vincent – Daily Echo

 

Veronica, also from the South West, paints a vivid miniature with a handful of words and a lot of suggestion.

https://rimons33.wordpress.com/2016/05/13/nightbirds-calling/

 

Ken’s poem is a nonet. Like Veronica’s it condenses the mystery and the atmosphere of the painting into a very few, well-chosen words. Lovely

Peacock Garden | rivrvlogr

 

Janice, On the Land, has chosen a formal style for this one—a pantoum. There’s a stately rhythm to this one that is perfect for the recurring image of the imperturbable woman climbing the stair.

Peacock garden – Ontheland

 

Doug, the Elusive Trope’s poem echoes Janice’s in a rather strange way. It’s a different form, but the image of the woman on the stair and the menacing eyes of the peacocks is the same. Unease is the dominating emotion here. Very atmospheric.

Faithful | Elusive Trope

 

Sri from the exotic East with a trio of triolets, all brightly coloured and joyful, love songs and flowers. I would have expected her to have a different opinion on peacocks as it’s her national bird 🙂

https://srisudhak.wordpress.com/2016/05/15/once-upon-a-time/

and a limerick

https://srisudhak.wordpress.com/2016/05/16/in-search-of-her-prince/

Thank you all for participating. Such a beautiful, brightly-coloured haul of poems this week! Don’t forget to look in tomorrow for the newt challenge.

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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

24 thoughts on “Poetry challenge Peacock Garden: the entries”

      1. Had me in hospital over the weekend… five bites, a small,red whale where my foot used to be and an allergic reaction to the antibiotics. I recover. Slowly.

  1. I’ve been meaning to join in, but work has been a (insert favorite cuss word here) recently. Sigh! I love how much effort you put into the challenge. 🙂

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