I had been going to try out a Kyrielle this week, but came across this picture and decided to give the photo prompt another week.
What does this image inspire? Hope, despair, luck, vast oceans, empty beaches, childhood stories, shipwreck, desert islands?
With such a wealth of subject matter, you might want to make things a bit more difficult/demanding by using some or all of these words. It’s up to you.
Ethereal, placid, meander, forget, silver
In case you’re wondering, I don’t cheat and just pick out words from a poem I’ve already written. I choose the words first, then try and fit them into a poem, just to make sure they aren’t too hard to place.
Please post the link to your poem in the comments before next Wednesday, and please have lots of fun.
There was a storm tonight, and nothing left to do
But shun the mocking light and send a word to you.
With trembling fingers write, the last worlds left to say,
Toss them in the night and watch them slip away.
Silver sprinkled waves fall crashing on the shore,
I hear no voice that saves, to make it like before.
The placid day is done, and I am for the dark
Without your shining sun that rises with the lark,
Without your river bright, meanders slow and strong,
My hopes have taken flight, hoarse the skylark’s song.
White feathers fill the sky, ethereal and yet,
The dreams refuse to die, my heart cannot forget.
Thank you for the lovely prompt – again! I didn’t read your poem until after I’d written mine, but I think there are echoes. I love your white feathers filling the sky. Here is my link: https://fmmewritespoems.wordpress.com/2016/05/18/message-in-a-bottle
Silver sprinkled waves – love it.
Thank you 🙂
love your poem 🙂
https://ladyleemanila.wordpress.com/2016/05/18/message-in-a-bottle/
Thank you 🙂
Excellent job Jane…I’m still struck between your lines
Forget my lines, write your own waves and boats 🙂
Ooooh… I like that a lot! I can see those waves, feel that wind, taste the salt spray on my lips. Very atmospheric!
Thanks! I was pleased with the way it turned out with the internal rhymes
I enjoyed your process comment: ‘ I don’t cheat’ Always appreciate reading your Poem as part of the prompt post.
Thanks Janice 🙂 I know some people don’t get on with rhyme or other constraints, and I like to try the prompt out first to make sure it isn’t going to be too difficult. It would be easy to write a poem and pick out a few of the words I’d used, but that would defeat the object of the words being an inspiration 🙂
You got the bells ringing, Jane! How about this: https://peterbouchier.wordpress.com/english-essays-and-poems-2/english-essays-and-poems/message-in-a-bottle/
I didn’t want to read yours until after I wrote mine. I love your white feathers fill the sky. . .what a magical image that is!
Here’s mine: https://merrildsmith.wordpress.com/2016/05/19/the-messages/
Thank you 🙂 The phrase of yours I liked best is
ethereal flakes of life floating
among the meandering silver fish
🙂
Thanks you! 🙂
I’m back!
https://wordsandfeathers.com/2016/05/19/poem-20160519/
With a vengeance 🙂
Hi Jane, here’s my take
https://srisudhak.wordpress.com/2016/05/20/lost/
https://methodtwomadness.wordpress.com/2016/05/20/sea-songs/
A lovely image, Jane, ripe with inspiration!
https://writinginnorthnorfolk.com/2016/05/20/i-put-my-poem-in-a-bottle/
I thought it would get the magic flowing 🙂
My inspired response:
https://rivrvlogr.wordpress.com/2016/05/20/stellar-plea/
I’m pleased you tried the kyrielle. It worked well for this type of poem. The refrain emphasizes the longing.
I’m not posting it on my site, for a reason. But here goes…
“my thoughts meander to that night
so ethereal was that sight
The rain without, the storm within
my oft remembered silver sin
scratched off my placid skin and yet
I’ve never tried to forget…”
I like the line:
The rain without, the storm within
very much 🙂 There’s a mystery behind these words. Thanks for joining in 🙂
🙂
I love this picture and the challenge words. I hope I’m not too late in participating. Here’s my entry: https://blog.triciadrammeh.com/2016/05/22/poetry-challenge-message-in-a-bottle/
It’s never too late, Tricia; The official deadline is Tuesday, unofficially there isn’t one 🙂
Hi Jane, love your poem. I’m afraid I didn’t finish mine for this week. Next time maybe:)
Thank you! You can always send it in with the next challenge poems 🙂
Hi Everyone
Here is my entry for this past week, a little late but I still wanted to share.
https://thoughtsandentanglements.wordpress.com/2016/05/25/perspective/
Pat