Haiku: Haven

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Garden, green island,

tree-shaded, bird-filled, song-bright,

sunlit, moon painted.

 

Poplars wind-whisper

finches gather stray sweet words

string a golden song.

 

Rosebuds swell, unfold

spill honeyed sun-warmed fragrance

butterfly nectar.

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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

31 thoughts on “Haiku: Haven”

    1. Thanks! I like the discipline of the syllable count but I don’t know how to do the clever kind, with hinge words and all that. And I hate the smart quiippy haiku. The natural, floral type of stuff is what the form is all about as far as I can gather.

      1. It came across here. These haiku are lush and sensual–especially the last one–but I like the first one best. It gives me a happy feeling. πŸ™‚

  1. Love that first one! I love those descriptions. I didn’t even realise I was reading haiku. Wtf is a hinge word??? Lol. I’m always surprised by how mathematical poetry is, number of syllables, number of words, number of lines, which lines are supposed to rhyme, which are refrains etc… makes my head spin! 😁

    1. As a writing discipline, those constraints are good, but they can get in the way of writing something that’s pleasant to read! As for that hinge word stuff, it’s too fiendishly oriental for me to get my head round.

      1. . Guess I’ll have to Google it then. Just out of nosiness. I’m sure it does get in the way at times. Not that you’d notice for the number of people who write beautiful haiku. Fair play. Its like flash poetry, isn’t it?

      2. You mean the partially sighted leading the blindfolded? Isn’t a lack of sight meant to focus your inner vision and increase your creativity?

    1. The finches especially love a tree that’s planted along the boulevard. I don’t know its name but it have big ugly dull red flowers flowers that look like pine cones. The only reason I can see for its existence is that it attracts whole flocks of goldfinches.

  2. I was wondering if you would be interested in being part of a β€œHaiku Hub” I am thinking of setting up on my blog. If you would like to be included just let me know in a reply and I will add your blog to the Hub Page. I am hoping to get as many Haiku writers together to share their writing.

      1. Absolutely not. I just thought it would be great to have a spot where people who write haiku (often or not) can share their poems or be discovered. Thanks for joining!

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