Just got back and find this hasn’t posted. Must a have got the settings wrong.
This week’s challenge is to write a trilonnet inspired by this photograph.
You can find out how to write a trilonnet here. I discovered I’ve already written trilonnets without realising it. It has eight syllables per line, and three stanzas of three lines. The rhyme pattern has the first lines of each stanza rhyme, the second lines, and the third. The last couplet rhymes with itself.
This is one I wrote to illustrate the form.
The light is gone and winter’s calling,
Wind strips the trees with sudden force,
Sedge whispers low the year is done.
Rime on branches, red leaves falling,
But bare thorns left on rose and gorse,
A shadow memory, the sun.
Too much sweetness, love is palling,
Too many songs, your voice is hoarse,
Our story ends before begun.
Red leaves carried on the river,
Winter looms, alone I shiver.
Rather than give you a few words as suggestions, this week I’m asking you to start your poem with the first four syllables:
The light is gone…
I leave the rest of the line to you as what follows will influence the rhymes in the next stanzas. Post the link to your poem in the comments before next Tuesday. Because I did last week’s round up early, I’ll post any last minute Pebbles entries with this challenge.
49 thoughts on “Poetry challenge #36: Drowning leaves”
Should be within my grasp. I’ll try.
Hope you do, Peter. There’s water in it if there isn’t a tall ship 🙂
OK here we go: https://peterbouchier.wordpress.com/english-essays-and-poems-2/owl-song/ no tall ship but definitely some wandering around – and music, too. Have a great weekend!
Welcome back! Another new form for me. https://janedougherty.wordpress.com/2016/06/22/poetry-challenge-36-drowning-leaves/
Back but not up and running yet! Thanks for sending this one, I’ll have to read it when I’ve caught up arrgghhh!!!
This is amazing!
Glad you like it 🙂 Why not have a go?
I’m doing the Filipino word challenge for July, but maybe after I’ll give it a try. 😊
Blimey! What’s that?
Rosema and Maria came up with the idea. I reblogged it a few days back. They’re calling it Word High July. Beautiful Filipino words with their definitions.
Sounds like a great idea! Just to show my ignorance, I thought they spoke Spanish in the Philippines.
I didn’t know what language they spoke. You’re not alone.
I really liked this form. Today. I don’t know why!
Promise to read when I catch up with myself 🙂
I like your trilonnet, so poignant. thanks for the prompt, Jane 🙂
Thanks! Comment to follow soon 🙂
I like how yours move from outward to inward.
I love this new form! Saving it for future tries. This week words have been a bit out of reach. But I hate to miss your challenge each week Jane. Scratched this out for you in the wee hours!
Hi jane here’s my take…
Sorry Jane for the wrong link…here’s the right one
Neither link works Sri 😦
Sorry again…my links are testing me hard again…here’s a proper one
Still doesn’t work 😦
Hi Jane, last night my system crashed and So couldn’t really do much…here’s the short link to my take
This one works 🙂
Jane here’s one more from myside…
Your poem is lovely, Jane. I really struggled with this format. Here’s my attempt: https://blog.triciadrammeh.com/2016/06/25/the-light-is-gone/
Link doesn’t work, Janice.
Thanks Jane. I’ll try to freshen it up and see what happens. Thanks for the prompt. The theme seemed daunting at first but then I came up with something.
I am not sure why my ping isn’t working. So here is my link:
At least the link is working 🙂
I like this form. I decided to veer off from the leaves, but used your phrase. 🙂 https://merrildsmith.wordpress.com/2016/06/26/lullaby/
I hadn’t even noticed there were no leaves in it 🙂
Thank you for the prompt=) I loved writing in this form. Your poem is beautiful!
My replies keep getting eaten up! Thank you, she says again! I might well use this form again.