Le Somnambule is a clever little painting. At first glance, the bright colours and simplistic figures with their awkward gestures remind me of an illustration in a children’s picture book. Looking closer though, the three faces seem anxious and their gestures more a question of not waving but drowning. And what is the cat looking at? I’d be interested to see how you interpret this theme of
I have used the cinquain form for this one. Shadow Poetry gives a detailed and interesting account of it’s creation, and how to write a good one. You don’t have to use the form if you don’t want to. Whichever form you choose, post the link to your post in the comments below before next Tuesday. Have fun!
fills my light steps
unseen, no touch, no sound,
shadows gather, darkness leads me
you step lightly,
walking in a dream world,
blindly yearning, reach for the moon.
43 thoughts on “Poetry challenge #39: Sleep walking”
Teeny tiny jewels of poems.
This painting reminds me of my friend who was woken by a ring on the doorbell at 4 in the morning and went downstairs to find her (sleepwalking) teenage son had climbed out of an upstairs window and landed (safely) in the garden. I think he went back to bed and slept quite well, but I don’t think she did!
That is the fear, isn’t ti? Walking off cliffs or onto the motorway.
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Fabulous painting…I remember that form too. You really need to think about each word. Good discipline. (K)
I’m sure you’ll come up with something as thought-provoking as the painting.
I hope so.
have a great day, Jane 🙂
You too 🙂
The cat knows.
Another wonderful prompt. I love your examples. The first one is so particularly atmospheric. Here is my attempt for the week.
This painting provoked such a strong memory for me. As I explained in my post, it was the cat who reminded me…Wonderful prompt and poetry form Jane. Have a great week! kat
A cinquain for my second
Thank you, Jane, for reminding me about cinquains.
Cinquains remind me of unpleasant things, but I had fun=) Here’s my take(s): https://fantasyraconteur.wordpress.com/2016/07/13/chaotic-nightmares/
And I love your poems, as always. Dream-like and beautiful.
Thank you 🙂
I had a hard time with the cinquain. I threw in another poem, too, because the painting made me want to write more. 🙂 https://merrildsmith.wordpress.com/2016/07/14/dreamscape/
I liked them both, but the cinquain read beautifully as far as i’m concerned. Magical 🙂
Thanks, Jane. It was about my fourth attempt. I think that remark about cinquains being used to teach grammar stuck with me, and I was taking the format much too literally. 🙂
I don’t stick to the formal rules either if they change the flow of the words.
Let’s all get up on the roof! Whee!
You forgot the fiddle 🙂
Hi Jane, here’s my take
I’ll edit the post for you.
Thank you. That was So sweet of you, Jane
They make a lovely collection of poems.
A late one, responding to Sarah: