You’ve never heard of this one, have you? The name was used by Sarah instead of tilus for last week’s poetry challenge, and I liked it so much I’ve given it a poetry form of its own. if you don’t get on with the trilune, just use the photo to prompt a poem in any style you feel appropriate on the theme of
These are the rules (but since I made them up I won’t mind if you don’t stick to all of them):
A trilune is a poem of three stanzas of three lines of 3×3 syllables each (that’s 9 in case you were wondering), circling a central theme. The rhyme is on the third line of each stanza so you get a pattern of abc dec fgc.
My example (the only one in existence, I’m afraid) is below.
Please post your link in the comments box before next Tuesday in time for the round up. Have fun!
We met in a dark and crowded room,
You with your eyes of such piercing green,
Caught in the pull of your gaze, I fell.
First touch, first kiss, first tender embrace,
But not a sight of your heart beneath,
You’d never a single secret tell.
Last time we met in a darkened room,
Your eyes were the green of long-dried kelp,
That drifts away on the ebb tide’s swell.
43 thoughts on “Poetry challenge #43: Trilune”
Here is my stab at it:
How fun! Love the name with the image–and your poem. 🙂
Thank you! It was Sarah who thought of the name. I hope she’s going to rise to the challenge.
When I saw the name on her post, I didn’t read it as “tri” and “lune.” Yes, I hope Sarah will “rise to the challenge.” 🙂
I’m hoping you all will!
A slightly tweaked trilune: https://fantasyraconteur.wordpress.com/2016/08/10/mark-of-moonlight/
I like this new form, and your example is beautiful. I love the constast between the first and last stanzas=)
Thank you! I’m glad you’ve got your teeth into this one. It should appeal to the mystic and lover of symbols in us 🙂
You’re right. I’m glad you were inspired to create it=)
I’d better see if I can make it work a second time…
I’m sure you can=)
We’ll see 🙂
Hopefully, I’ll be able to make up for missing out on the last few challenges by submitting this one: https://peterbouchier.wordpress.com/english-essays-and-poems-2/three-moons/ I tried to combine both of your options in a trilune about three moons.
Lunacy x 3
A very attractive form… and I like the rhythm suggestion included in your guidelines (3×3) you wrote two great examples (I read your next post first).
Thanks Janice. I wasn’t sure if it would work in practice, but it does. Glad you like it 🙂
I love the idea of a new form. And I am eager to give it a go! 🙂
You will be one of the pioneers 🙂
Here you go Jane! I love your new form! -Kat
Man, that was hard for me…
Here’s mine. I like this form. Great creation, Jane! The nine syllable lines are a bit difficult, but give an interesting rhythm, and I like the rhyme.
I’m definitely going to try it again.
You’re right, the rhythm needs a bit of work to get it right, but it can be done 🙂
https://fmmewritespoems.wordpress.com/2016/08/11/three-moons-a-trilune-for-jane-dougherty/ I am battling with devices, and dodgy wifi so I hope this comes through! I like the form very much!
Thanks for giving me the idea 🙂
TomMake a special illustrated, calligraphied copy of the very first trilune would be a great ideal.
Here is a measly trilus oops tilus
full of errors: To make a …
You could always set up a company called Torn…
I love this Jane.You set the bar high with your original.
I never get enough time to join in these challenges but I just finished being a plumber for the evening (from poet to pattern maker to plumber but at least I can flush the toilet!!!) and had to give it a go.
When you can’t get your mum or your dad to do it, you end up having to learn basic home maintenance 🙂 Glad you found time for a bit of poetry once the sanitation was seen too.