I saw the cloud burst

The Daily Post prompt is: Witness.


I saw the cloud burst on the lake

And no sound make

But falling rain

Like summer grain.


I saw the water dimple-specked,

With silver flecked,

Beneath the clouds,

Outspread like shrouds.


The path you’d take by the lake’s edge,

Where wind-swept sedge

Bodes winter chill,

Is empty still.



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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

12 thoughts on “I saw the cloud burst”

  1. Jane! This is … nope I can’t find a word to compliment what you’ve just written, there isn’t one good enough.
    When I read something by Blake this is the reaction I have. Your poem here gave me the same reaction.
    That’s how good it is.

    1. I don’t know what to say. That is a powerful compliment! I like this form. The words seem to fit into shape without too much difficulty. I’m really pleased you liked it so much 🙂

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