This week’s challenge is more about the sound of the poem than the content. Sometimes it seems to me that we work hard to get our thoughts either into rhymes or simply into the right line lengths, and don’t listen to the sound it makes. This week, I thought we could concentrate on listening to the beats in the line rather than simply count syllables or find an appropriate rhyme.
Tetrameter (four beats to the line) and pentameter (five beats) give a rhythm that helps to make a line memorable. Try to think more of the way the stress falls than the number of syllables. It will inevitably mean shuffling word order or occasionally choosing a synonym, but you will end up with a poem that flows like a song.
You can use either four or five beats, and you don’t have to rhyme unless you want to. I’ve chosen to rhyme occasionally, and find it’s effective to end with a rhyme.
The theme is
Stars, night, and water
The rather lovely image is loaned by ©Jess Mann
My poem is in unrhymed (mostly) tetrameter. I’ve bolded the stress syllables so you see what I mean.
Forgot to add, usual rules, post the link to your post in the comments before next Tuesday for the round up, please 🙂
One time the stars wheeled just for us,
A midnight dance across the sky,
We’d watch their brightness cabriole,
Leap into unimagined depths.
One time the stars shone in a sea
Of wishes dreams and fantasies,
When you were all the world to me,
The dark, the light, the softest dusk.
That time is past, stargazing nights
When nothing could keep us apart;
No longer can I stretch my hand
To touch a star, your face, your heart.
Perhaps one day you may recall,
How love was plucked from night’s dark pall.