For Sonya’s three line tales photo prompt
Photo©Steven Wei
His head hurt, light pounded and he couldn’t remember where he was or how he’d got there.
Stumbling to his feet he gazed in awe at the stacked apartments, balconies and walkways that boxed in his vision— “Jesus, that’s fucking high!”—drawing his gaze to a dull throbbing brilliance his numbed senses had difficulty focusing on.
“You’re looking down, man”—a voice whispered behind his left shoulder—“into the bronze ocean”—and an unseen hand pushed him over the edge of eternity.
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How frightful to wake up to a nightmare
I hope it was a nightmare. At least you wake up from those eventually.
I’m not quite sure what the Bronze Ocean is (that huge sky, maybe?), but I love that phrase. This slightly messes with my head – your upside down world – but in a good way. A lovely read, Jane 🙂
The sky is the bronze ocean—I don’t know what it is either, just know I wouldn’t want to be pushed into it 🙂
It’s a gorgeous phrase. I wonder what will happen to your protagonist now? Is there any return from the bronze ocean?
It could be a portal to a pleasant world. I might have a think about it 🙂
Be kind!
Am I ever cruel? Don’t answer that.
Ok 😊
Be nice to hear more about it 🙂
I’ve done a bit more. Still don’t know where we’re going though.
Somehwhere interesting … 🙂
i hope so!
🙂
Someone is going somewhere bad. Uh oh. This is just the kind of tale I like. More!
Have you ever read the CS Lewis sci-fi books? Perelandra—I think this is maybe where he ends up.
I did, a long time ago. Now I’ll need to take a look back, this whets my appetite.
I must reread too. They were favourite books when I was a teenager.
Yes. You know, I find myself more and more re-reading things I read when young. And I am so happy when I do it and find how much a book still speaks to me, in more ways, too, usually, than back when I had less life experience.
So many books we read as children have depths to them we never suspected. They were written by adults after all.
Yes, and I think the more the writer just tried to write vs. doing something “uplifting” or “educational”, but just wrote a good story with some depth, well, the better it was. The “improving” books just don’t hold up, I think.
I think you’ve made a good distinction there. Those goody two shoes books were written ‘at’ children. Books like the Narnia stories, while they still had a didactic message were written by an artist who was writing for his own pleasure and satisfaction as well.
What a magnificent inverted vision.
Glad you like it 🙂 I get vertigo looking up as well as looking down.
Whoa, didn’t see that one coming! …edge of eternity… wow! 🙂
Sounds rather final, doesn’t it, considering it’s eternity 🙂
Oh my!
I saw there is a Part II, so I’m headed there. 🙂
I might write a Part III but at the rate of three lines per episode, the end could be a long way off 🙂
Go for it. 🙂
I’ll try.