River runs where the kingcups grow

For the dverse R’river’prompt, a villanelle.

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River runs where the kingcups grow,

Their yellow faces catch the light,

At evening when the sun is low.

 

Through the fields making poppies blow,

Wind sweeps dark as the watchful kite,

River runs where the kingcups grow.

 

Mist is rising from the river slow,

Pearl grey the dusk sinking into night,

At evening when the sun is low.

 

Past muddy banks when the night folk go

To drink the wild streamโ€™s ripples bright,

River runs where the kingcups grow.

 

Fox and deer glide through duskโ€™s pink glow,

Ever wary and poised for flight,

At evening when the sun is low.

 

Had I the words to tell them so,

Theyโ€™d know I mean no harm nor fright,

But always where the kingcups grow,

They slip away when the sun is low.

 

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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

48 thoughts on “River runs where the kingcups grow”

  1. Lovely indeed, & kudos for using a classic form. Mostly I run with free verse unless the prompt is classical form. I must say though over the years, I have adopted bits & shreds of the classics, making them my own.

  2. Gorgeous in both visual images and musical words. And what a well-chosen accompanying picture which seems to match the mood.

  3. Okay, after I post my reply, I shall look up villanelle……not familiar with this form. But this is beautiful. Love the refrain…..loved reading it aloud for a second reading. Favorite line: “Wind sweeps dark as the watchful kite,”
    A wonderful write, Jane.

      1. Okay — I am even more impressed now that I’ve read what the form is (and Dylan Thomas’ poem)! I’ve written it down in my notebook/journal…..took me a while to get it down so I understood the form — kind of like diagramming a poem! This would indeed be a challenge…and you have definitely risen to the challenge — kudos!

      2. It looks horribly complicated to begin with, but when you’ve written a few of them you stop having to check the map to see which repeat line should go where.

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