Swift and smooth the river runs

The NaPoWriMo suggestion today is alliteration.

 

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Swift and smooth the river runs,

Buttercup-blazoned banks beside,

A golden hoard about my feet,

But all my wealth left with the tide.

 

I dip my hand into the stream,

In silk-smooth water solace seek,

A host of silver spangles catch,

But none tomorrow makes less bleak.

 

Swift and smooth the seasons run,

Spring then summer spin the years,

Blackbirdโ€™s song spills through the shade,

But not a note can stop my tears.

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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

17 thoughts on “Swift and smooth the river runs”

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  2. Love the combination of alliteration and rhyme which feels very natural. I sometimes find alliterative poems sounding forced, but this is quite the opposite. Thank you.

    1. Thanks Linda. I feel exactly the same way about alliteration. Anyone can open the dictionary and string together lots of words beginning with the same letter. Doesn’t make it poetry ๐Ÿ™‚

    1. I’m glad you like it. I rewrote this poem from the first draught, same words, but it had no rhythm. Funny how it isn’t just about the words, it’s the word order too ๐Ÿ™‚

  3. Funny how it isn’t just about the words, it’s the word order too ๐Ÿ™‚ Thank you ๐Ÿ™‚ Then I think you should write a poem about one ๐Ÿ™‚

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