Trout tickled

I tried very hard to get a haiku from Ronovan’s Please & Tease word prompt and gave up. This is a tanka, with a very tenuous connection, in spirit only, to those two words. I’m offering it to the Real Toads’ imaginary garden where I think it will be happy.

PhotoยฉOregon State University

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In the deep pool, trout,

immobile in summer shade,

waits for the ripple,

tastes the stippled light dimple

of the mayflyโ€™s fatal skim.

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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

29 thoughts on “Trout tickled”

  1. I certainly like it very much. Excellent selection of words, for both sound qualities and meaning. You captured the almost freeze frame moment perfectly.

    1. Thank you, Kerry ๐Ÿ™‚ I think there’s a word for the way trout and salmon keep still in a river current but I’ve forgotten it. I’m glad the sense came over anyway.

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