Leaky but not broken

I’m going to work back through Jilly’s prompts drawn from lines of Jim Harrison’s poetry. I’m not a fan (yet) but the lines work as a springboard.

Today’s, a ditty more than anything more profound, is inspired by the quote:

“Words are moving water, muddy, clear, or both”  ~  Jim Harrison


Clinging to the river bank with broken fingernails,

Vacuous words of false regret float from the bridge above.

You tell me it will be all right, as you watch the swallows leave,

And I know you’re going with them, as you ravel up your love.

I watch the river rolling on its busy bustling way,

As it carries ships and feathers to a new life on the blue.

I climb back up the muddy bank, watch sun peep through the clouds,

Water dripping, draggle-haired in a strange world without you.


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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

15 thoughts on “Leaky but not broken”

  1. I’m so glad you use these lines as springboards. You have combined imagery and metaphor here with engaging lines like the broken fingernails and the swallows leaving. Good stuff! And I doubt Harrison would have been offended by your not being a fan (yet) – he was a tough bird; one-eyed, smoking, drinking, carousing gormound. 😉

  2. Well written Jane. It brings me back to a lonely childhood and bad memories, but sunny days where growth happens by itself. love yer stuff 🙂

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