This web of gathered morning

A morning poem inspired by Mick Talbot’s Epanalepsis poetry.


Morning creeps across a field of creeping sunlight,

Filling spider webs with crystal-spangled webbing,

Gathering night, shadows beneath the hedges gathered,

Singing low the songs of blackbirds where the cattle low.

I wake and wade the low sunlight, this web of gathered morning.

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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

19 thoughts on “This web of gathered morning”

      1. Depends. With poetry forms, if I understand the rules I stick to them, and if I can’t, I write a different poem. If I don’t understand the rules…I write a different poem.

      2. I make of them what I can and write, accordingly, and, if someone comes along tells I’m wrong and tells how/why I’ll correct what I have done or write another, as I did, for your Three Squared forma.

      3. Sometimes you find different rules for the same form on different sites. Some simplify which to my mind alters the original idea. Like writing a villanelle without using the rhyme scheme. The rhyme is at the core of the idea, so if you don’t stick to it, you haven’t written a villanelle.

      4. Your right my first villanelle was just that, no rhyme scheme, Its just the same with them all depends where you look. My pet hate is the way all Japanese poetry has been has been destroyed by the modernists. Please don’t misunderstand the latter for the do write good poetry, they just go by so called modern adjustments/simplifications, so to say. To me a Haiku is not a Haiku unless it conforms. Again re the latter, I understand that the Japanese language has more or less, (as soon wrote that and thought about it that element of doubt arose, whatever, the gyst of what I am inferring is still there), syllables per say and when converted don’t translate very well, and vice versa.

      5. oops! I wasn’t tagetting you personally about the villanelle, I just picked the example out of the air. The thing that I dislike about many ‘modern’ haiku is that they sound more like advertising copy than poems. Smart little quips that have nothing to do with either nature or poetry. There must be a name for that kind of poem but it isn’t haiku.

      6. No, the thought never crossed my mind, for what you said was correct, the trouble is, as you said there is so many versions of the ‘right way’, in general, and for the aspiring poet all that adds up to is confusion, and sometimes altercations, been down both roads..

      7. I honestly don’t think it’s worth worrying about. Unless you’re writing for a sonnet competition, your poem doesn’t have to have that question and answer aspect, or the same rhyme scheme.You write your poem and call it a poem. If it is meant to be a sonnet, and you call it one, to my mind, it ought to be one.

      8. So, so sorry, my first Serpent’s Tail poem a misunderstanding…
        Landing me in bother with the inventor of the serpent’s tail…
        Mail, O I got plenty, reprimanding me, but very gently…
        Mentally I thought what wrote was right, she too, thought it nice…
        Thrice my attempts were wrong, so this time I have got it right…
        Might seem a strange way to reply to any comment, but I often do…
        Phew! The last word of every line, with the first of the next, must rhyme…
        Time has helped me, and Catie’s nudge has got me through my woe…
        So, so sorry, my first Serpent’s Tail poem a misunderstanding…


      9. Brilliant! I liked your idea of making a line into a whole stanza. I thought it was deliberate 🙂 You could patent that version and call it something else. A ‘Pipeline’ maybe?

      10. This was originally posted as a comment on Poetrysoup, and their comment box cant handle poetry in separate lines, for example three short lines become one, So to show they were separate lines in one stanza I added the ellipses, any check here, you’ll see where I am coming from, and more,

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