This haibun is for Frank Tassone’s challenge, our thoughts on freedom.
There is a place where nothing holds the arms at our sides, feet on the ground, the love trapped inside tight-bolted hearts. They call it freedom. Free to hold, to fly, to love, but always, the cord that trails behind, through dark nights and bright days pulls tight at the last before we touch the stars. A voice calls, “Wait for me. Don’t go.” So we ravel up our dreams and blow a kiss to the stars and curl around the mundane and the dutiful, and try to make it glow.
Night sky, star-flowered,
too high to walk its dark paths,
I smell the roses.
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#Haiku Happenings #11: Jane Dougherty’s latest #haibun on freedom for my current #Haikai challenge!
Thank you, Frank 🙂
My pleasure, Jane!
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i don’t know, Mrs. Doughherty, seem truly difficult to me..
i even google this form of poetry…
It’s just a bit of rambling prose with a haiku that echoes some of the thoughts.
Do you mean thoughts with poetry?
More or less.
i’m sorry darling i’ve gotten lost?
No, you were right. You understood.
Now I’m toadaly lost! 🐸🐸🐸
Never mind. We all are 🙂
i have a direction, the road is lost!
Ha ha! Good one 🙂 Just keep on your track, never mind the road.
Yeah, but sight seeing is fun? Yes, no?
Depends who you’re with. Then it isn’t so much what you see that’s fun, more the person you share it with.
Deep thought! Sharing oneself, toadally depends said person…
Won’t that be building a relationship?
I suppose so.
Is that like a maybe?
More like a probably.
This is still a maybe, i think so, i don’t know but!
It’s not a yes!
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Within a law, i have do dance around, because contract gave me a position of number two.. The only answers are an appsolute positive yes! all the rest is maybe, unknown an not sure..
Nobody in family can lie, they’re all connect, oldone hear all the voices an there thoughts along their emotions All about the world..
You’ve lost me now, but this contract thing is still creepy, I say.
i was a greedy addict, thinking of only one thing, where to find an get more dope..
Now i’m a little more patient.. Still a greedy addict!
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Wise, Jane. In many respect we live within bounds…my haibun echoes this idea too.
Freedom is too big a word for me. It usually means oppression for somebody else.
Lovely haiku at the end of this. It says to me, and this is just my opinion, that no matter how free we are, there is the reality that draws us back within ourselves. But there is that sweet smell of roses…
That’s very close to how I was thinking. I have a problem with these big sweeping ideas like ‘freedom’. Nothing against the great ‘freedom fighters’ but they tend to be men whose idea of freedom only ever extends to men. They will fight tooth and nail against discrimination and treat women like subhumans. Freedom has limitations. The stars are not ours to reach, to keep, or even to touch. We have to make do with more mundane but equally precious freedoms like the appreciation of roses and our children.
I went ‘oof! at the pulling back at the point of reaching the stars. The haiku a perfect conclusion. This is an excellent haibun.
Thank you! I don’t think we ever reach the stars, nor should we. Freedom is a state of mind and is different for each individual, not something that you can have and put on the mantle piece.
Not for the mantle piece – totally agree! 🙂
There are freedoms to hunt, to kill, to travel, to buy, to destroy, to maim, to imprison and enslave that I am totally not in favour of!
And we insist on our freedom to speak out against it!
That’s the real freedom, and one that is under attack everywhere.
Yes. Alas!
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Yes, there is big idea FREEDOM, and then there is the perhaps mundane, but also important ability to smell the roses freedom.
And I totally understand what you say about the use of the word “freedom” often means the oppression of others. Kind of like making a country “great.”
Bigly.
YUGE.
There’s going to be a French documentary on the TV today that explains why Mr. Bigly really is mad. One of those days I wish we had a TV, but then, there are some things I already suspected so…
Interesting. I would like to hear the French take. It really seems there has been a decline in his cognitive abilities and mental health–though he’s always been a scumbag.
I’m afraid the US is only ever in the news for a laugh. The political commentators find it almost surreal that not only is this character with the charisma and sensitivity of a rotten potato the president of the ‘greatest’ nation on earth, but that he was actually voted into office.
Yes, but thankfully, not by the majority of the popular vote! We’re not all idiots here.
No, and that comes over strongly. There’s a cleavage in every society and Trump seems to have found the wedge to stick into the gap. Every country has one. Look at Nigel Farrage in the UK. Absolute poison.
Yes. It is crazy and/or horrifying–depending on how much power they have.
We were talking about this at supper. No matter how lunatic these dictators or elected megalomaniacs are, they can’t do anything really terrible without the backing of the military, and the military aren’t going to jump into a situation where they might get killed. Sending task forces into a foreign country is one thing, starting a nuclear war is quite another. It’s at this point that most dictators get bumped off by their own army.
Ooo!!! I think you hit it there Merril..
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“Freedom” is one of those words like happy. Overrated and undefinable. Now the feeling of aliveness…(K)
Now you’re talking!
Great conversation Jane & Merril☺. I love listening to you guys talk😊
We could rabbit on forever. It’s why the Atlantic was invented—to keep up apart. Imagine if we lived close enough to actually spend time together!