Haibun: Long spring day

This extreme haibun (55 words) is for the dverse prompt, long spring day.

Sun, hothouse orange, lowering to the tree line, shines directly into the west windows, shines through the open inner doors, floods the kitchen and beyond. We sit at the window, lapped by golden meadow and eat supper with soft spring sun in our plates.


Light stretches the length

of a tender-budded branch

spring fire ignited.

Published by

Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

43 thoughts on “Haibun: Long spring day”

    1. Thank you! When I saw ‘extreme’ haibun mentioned as a form, I thought it sounded like a good idea. I’m with you on brevity. Some haibun ramble in a rather chatty way that doesn’t fit with my idea of poetry at all.

  1. You create such a beautiful image here. I want to be sitting there.
    We have two table cloths that come from France. I’ll picture them at your house with the sun streaming in.

    1. We have a lovely sunshine coloured one that I got out last week and husband has covered it up with a check oilcloth because he’s worried he’ll destroy it with tomato sauce or wine stains.

      1. It was on one of mine that the Passover wine incident happened! I think the cold water soaking got it all out. It’s been used and washed so many times now that the colors are faded, but I still like it.

  2. + 1 on the extreme form – so interesting – and the compression is so well done here. Like others, you took me to your kitchen, to your supper table and the dazzle of that bright late sunshine. Delish.

  3. Ooooh I want to sit at this table with you….with soft spring sun on my plate! What a wonderful scene you’ve put me into with your words!
    Apologies for the late reading…trying desperately.y to catch up and then you’ve given me this delightful pause😊

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