Almost as cool as rain

Daily word count achieved = poetry treat. A tritina for the Secret Keeper’s writing challenge. The words:



No gentle downpour this, of cooling rain,

But shafts of heat, sun-spears that bring us low,

From heights of haze, the shimmer falls.


Blue, the water colour of the river falls,

Silver, sharp, a tingle on the skin, the rain,

Red-gold, the sun at evening, dropping low.


As burning day gives way to night below,

The touch of evening, gentle on skin falls,

Almost as silver cool, moon pale, as rain.


Rain, with low sounds, falls.


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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

27 thoughts on “Almost as cool as rain”

  1. It IS stunning, Jane. I got such a sense of peace reading it–so thank you for that!
    Congratulations on getting your word count done. I’m just getting started on work here. 🙂

  2. Great Jane! Its really “cooling down” these days. Also possible as a poetical advertising for the rum label with the bat? 😉 Thank you very much, and have a great week ahead. Michael

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