It’s no joke without fire

An adage for Jilly’s dverse prompt.

 

There is something I have learned

from winter nights,

when frost crisps the grass

and creeps across the bedroom floor,

when the stove is ash and the moon is cold,

stars strike no sparks,

and brittle ice forms on the water in the well,

(the one warm place

on this small patch of earth,

nights of frost and crystal clear,

is a fortress built of wool and duck feather quilt

until you yank it)

that one good turn

takes all the blanket.

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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

52 thoughts on “It’s no joke without fire”

      1. Yes, but what you did with it is NOT primitive – the lines are delightful – that’s what makes the ending so great – a complete surprise!

  1. I felt the chill with the yanking away of that blanket. Love the twists here and the eloquence woven within like this ..
    ‘..when frost crisps the grass
    and creeps across the bedroom floor…’ Sublime!

      1. Not me. I slip the blanket edge under me before I drift off on a cold night. Hard to do the burrrrrito wrap when I’m weighing down the comforter.

  2. This has really tickled me , so much that the cats are staring at me suspiciously! And the title gave nothing away, so I wasn’t expecting the ending, Jane, just enjoying the frost crisping the grass and the brittle ice in the well. It’s the cats who take the blanket in our house.

    1. One of the kids had a joke book that used to tickle me. Very unsubtle humour, but made me laugh. Like:
      If I have five apples in one hand and seven apples in the other, what have I got?
      Big hands.

  3. Hah! I was completely enamored with the imagery, reading along, loving it, transfixed by the imagery really….and then that twist at the end! ๐Ÿ™‚ Chuckling over my coffee I am! And oh yes….haven’t many of us been in that situation…the forever blanket tugging that comes sleeping as a twosome. I think it’s probably much more rampant now that folks are using queen and king sized beds rather than doubles ๐Ÿ™‚

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