The #OctPoWriMo prompt is about betrayal and the suggested form is a palindrome, in which it reads betrayal one way, forgiveness the other. I don’t think I’m capable of writing a palindrome, but here’s another cleave poem that reads sad/happy.
It was in the grey of morning, birds were singing in the trees
When you left, I heard you go, with the sound of breaking hearts
I closed my eyes against the light, sun was on the brink, rose
Leaching into the grey, with the promise of a soft day.
I should have seen it coming, I see so much ahead,
But the wishing and the wanting, for us, a lifetime not enough,
Veiled the fractures and the flaws. I reach out my hand to touch you,
Too late, your footsteps fading, your face turns to the light,
You will see a different dawn, with a familiar smile,
A future, ocean vast, bright as the glowing sky,
While I refuse the heaped regrets, thoughts circling back to me
To grasp the coming day and the completion of happiness.
‘ You will see a different dawn’ ah the painful wrench of separation , but one day we must undergo total and final separation. Perhaps that is why we would like to leave some imprint of our short lives , in the hope we will be remembered.
I think that’s true. One of the reasons for the urge to have children, to reproduce ourselves.
Skillfully written!
Thank you, Sam 🙂
nicely done!
Thank you!
Don’t sell yourself short. This is amazing. 😀
It’s a difficult one to pull off. I’m pleased you think I managed it!
You pulled it off rather brilliantly I think!
Thank you!
This is gorgeous in message and construction! I love how you still invoked the idea of the palindrome, which is a type of mirror poem. The way your poem reflects in each line and creates two poems in one is brilliant. Fantastic job!
Thank you! I’m glad you liked the two-way story.
This is amazing, Jane. I love the way the expressions forged in each line. Brilliant work 🙂
Thank you, Sunita. I was pleased with the way it turned out 🙂
It’s perfect, three perfect poems in one. Two heartbreakingly sad and one full of hope. All beautiful 💜
I’m glad you like the result. I put a lot of thought into it.
It shows it is lovely 💜
Thank you 🙂
Well done Jane. Both are wonderful, in opposition, and together. (K)
Thank you. It worked, for once!
Absolutely brilliant!❤
Thank you!
❤ This is a beautiful cleave, Jane. I've not tried one yet, but you've got me fascinated by the form (again! You're really good at that 🙂 ) I had to postpone poetry yesterday; not only did the day conspire to be Totally Potato (germs were passed by students), but I couldn't even see the full moon due to heavy rain! Insult to injury! I did try the palindrome though…after some sleep.
How’s the migraine? I’d never be able to tackle a cleave poem with a migraine.
Palindrome sounds like a tropical disease to me. I’ll have to check, but I thought it was the form where the lines have to make sense when read backwards.