#Tanka Tuesday: haiku for troubled water

Une fois n’est pas coutume, as we say over here—a syllable-counted haiku for Colleen Chesebro’s #tanka tuesday challenge. I’m getting more minimalist with haiku these days.

Garonne rain


light plays on water

silvering pond’s troubled depths

beneath the pike waits

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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

23 thoughts on “#Tanka Tuesday: haiku for troubled water”

  1. Lovely; I especially like the image in the second line. I did initially giggle at the idea of getting “more” minimalist with haiku — it being by far the most minimalist form I know. But I think I see what you mean.

      1. There are many that write that way, and the syllable count is different in Japan. You are an advanced poet and should write Haiku the way your heart whispers the words to you. ❤

      2. Thank you for the compliment! I like the discipline of syllable counting, but somehow, the haiku seems to prefer the image, however few syllable it takes to make it.

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