Rain pours

For the NaPoWriMo prompt—if. Free verse, only punctuation the ?

 

rain pours

as it did yesterday

and no gleam in the sky

today is yesterday

repeated

same gestures

same damp in the air

in our eyes

no gleam

green there is

and birdsong echoing in hollows

if they flew

would we care much?

their song is all that matters

and if we don’t hear behind the double glazing?

if would should could

then why not is and will?

because they are slippery words

full of broken promises

I hold your hands tight

as if they are wings

and you might fly

with the birds and their hollow singing

would you?

if what?

you open your voice

to sing?

the glass swallows the words

you smile

I think

unless it is a reflection

long gone

 

 

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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

19 thoughts on “Rain pours”

  1. Lots of ifs here–I hope the sun comes out. 🙂
    I liked the way this flowed, and these lines:
    “I hold your hands tight
    as if they are wings
    and you might fly”

    1. I had a look at the suggested poems ie the poems that are held up as models, and they were both the kind of poems I think of as bells and whistles poems. It isn’t a style I like, and this is as close as I shall ever get to it 🙂

      1. They are the kind of poems that use stylistic quirks like running words together and using lower case i instead of I. Not to my taste at all, but it seems to be what is held up as the example.

      2. OK. I just read them. I see what you mean. I couldn’t read the first one–too annoying, though I think there were probably nice phrases, but the s just randomly by itself? I don’t get that. 🙂

      3. Is that the one where all the ifs are joined to the next word? If you need to pull stunts like that to make people say, wow, what a clever poem, count me a non-poet.

      4. No, just today’s. It’s the power of suggestion. I like prompts, but it’s true, they can lead to nudging everyone in the same direction. I had to stop myself automatically beginning with the word ‘if’.

  2. because they are slippery words
    full of broken promises
    I hold your hands tight
    as if they are wings
    and you might fly

    Oh, gorgeous gorgeous gorgeous! I love the imagery of those few lines. (So true, re: the slippery words as well.)

    I didn’t start my poem with ‘if’! I didn’t even get to much of it either until the end. I’m still catching up and finally am at Day 6, and it took forever, and I’m still not happy with it!

    https://shukuen.blogspot.com/2019/04/glopowrimo-day-6-wish-for-kitty-mao.html

    1. Most people did start with ‘if’. Not very original unless what follows is going to be so different. I’m glad you like it 🙂 I’ll be over to read yours tomorrow. It’s past my bed time already 🙂

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