Haikai challenge: Fawn

For Frank Tassone’s haikai challenge. The word is ‘fawn’.

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night visitors

hart barks and gathers

hinds and fawns

shadows pass through the long grass

stripping the apple trees


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Jane Dougherty

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39 thoughts on “Haikai challenge: Fawn”

      1. Certainly the case for deer. Haha! It must be easy to be them in that sense minus the fact they have to dodge cars if they’re ever in the streets.

      2. The deer we get aren’t suburban deer. There’s no traffic so they don’t get bothered by cars, but for more than five months of the years they get shot at by hunters to they tend to stay away from people. They wander around mostly at night, but we see them here in the daytime sometimes. It’s a no shooting zone all year round 🙂

      3. That’s certainly an improvement. I’m still in the ‘burbs, so that’s not the case with the deer around where I’m from. It is a bummer that some of them get shot at. Good to know how it’s a safe haven more or less for them.

      4. It’s a sort of low key gun culture here. There’s a tiny minority of the population has guns, around 0.7% and they are bunched in very rural areas (like here) where the law is a little bit on the flexible side. They shoot almost anything during the shooting season so although there aren’t many of them, it’s like having a mad gunman possibly at large in any place where wild animals live and breed.

      5. Really now? That’s a bit of a shock to me, but it does make sense. Of course if this was America, it would happen way more often in that kind of environment when it comes to guns. Just leave the animals alone and let them live peacefully, dang it!

      6. The hunting phenomenon goes back to the dawn of time. You’d just think that it would be one of those things like public torturing and executions that people would have stopped doing by now.

      7. Of course. You would think it would be the case, but apparently not. I can understand if one’s doing it for survival skills and emergencies, but why go hunt when you can go to a supermarket or at the very least a butcher’s shop?

      8. Exactly. Nobody needs meat anyway. I’ve never bought that story about people being so poor they are forced to shoot animals to feed their children. We have extremely poor people here who live on hand outs. They don’t have homes, guns, cars or freezers.

      9. Thank you! I’m sure even in an idyllic rural environment, people wouldn’t need to go hunting to get food. There are people like that wandering around without those amenities? Wow. I wasn’t aware of that.

      10. Europe is not the US. Wages are low, unemployment is high and so is the cost of living. But we have a generous state system for health care and housing. People fall through the cracks though, and it doesn’t help what we call ‘poor workers’ the people who have jobs but the job just doesn’t pay the bills.

      11. I wasn’t aware of that in Europe and I do apologize if I came off as callous or uncaring. America certainly isn’t far off since half the country is living in poverty, too. Good point about health care and housing. I wish the US would step on being better at health care, but that’s a long rant for another day. I see and that works in both sides of the Atlantic. I heard about a term called the working poor which deals with exactly what you’re talking about.

      12. You didn’t come over that way at all. Some of your compatriots are very badly informed about what’s going on outside their own county.
        The working poor is probably the right expression in English. I know it in French. To have a system that offers education, health care and social benefits to everyone is expensive. In the US I don’t think you as individuals pay much in compulsory social contributions and if people here were given the option they probably wouldn’t either. One of the cases where democracy isn’t the best way to get the more moral and compassionate outcome.

      13. Just wanted to be sure. This was new information to me, so I was just curious. I definitely agree that most Americans are badly informed about what’s happening here in the US. I’m not perfect either since I do feel that I need to get better at local politics and elections which never get promoted in the media. The closest you’ll get is governor, senator, or representative ads, but that’s only during major election years more or less.

        Yes, I’ve been hearing that phrase more often especially in independent media. That’s right about America not paying as much for so many things when it comes to taxes given how privatized health care is and how expensive post-secondary education is (hey, I’m thankful I paid my student loans off a few years ago).

      14. It’s hard to see anything but hypocrisy in all the flag-waving and MAGA stuff when there is absolutely no notion of the caring state that looks after all its members. Sounds much more like a grab what you can for yourself state.

    1. They come round here mainly at night though we’ve seen a few in daylight. They are slowly chomping their way through the young trees… Good thing there are a lot of young trees.

      1. Yes, we’re more likely to see them at night or early morning, but sometimes during the day. When I saw the deer the other day, it was early morning before too many people were around.

  1. Lovely poem, very mysterious. First i thought its about a hare. 😉 Now i have to memorize “Haikai” too. Btw, this one “where the law is a little bit on the flexible side.! is very expressive to. 🙂 Michael

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