Stream

For Colleen’s Tanka Tuesday, a shadorma.

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From its source

stream leaps for the light,

earth-channelled,

sun-yearning.

I taste darkness in its bones,

stars in its glitter.

 

Rushing wild,

tumbling with a child’s

eagerness

no notion

of when, why or tomorrow,

pool-plashed, sun-dappled.

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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

24 thoughts on “Stream”

  1. There is so much I love about your choice of words. Your imagery is fabulous here, “I taste darkness in its bones, stars in its glitter.” I read and reread this poem numerous times and each read is a new experience. What an amazing description of a rumbling brook. LOVE it!! ❤

    1. Thanks Colleen! Your response is so encouraging. I find it easy in these very short forms to be one dimensional, purely descriptive. Getting a deeper meaning is the test for me.

      1. I find the meaning through your description. Not everything has to be spelled out. Possibly, the brook is a metaphor for our life’s journey. Meaning can be inferred also as a snapshot of a mindful moment you captured in your description. Just let your words flow… ❤️

      2. That’s true, it doesn’t have to be made obvious, but I do think a straight description lacks something. Even in a haiku, as far as I understand it, there’s supposed to be a deeper meaning than the obvious one. That’s hard to do!

    1. Nature is made up of contrasts. We tend to hanker after a steady diet of warm sunshine, a perpetual high noon. So we jet off to places that offer it. One of the many ways where we go wrong.

    1. Thank you 🙂 Sometimes it works and the right words just happen to have the right number of syllables, but it’s luck, and there must be hundreds of poems that never get written because the right words have too many/too few syllables.

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