Prometheus Rose

The first poem the Oracle gave me was so gloomy I went straight to the ‘nature’ set to get the antidote.

 

I bring fire to men, he said,

and smoke and killing fouled the air,

leaving us with only bleeding holes for eyes

that have never healed

and no joy in the morning.

Like lies formed of an empty heart’s desire

born to nights

 

~of red darkness~

 

springs the rose,

that even in winter shines

with fruit, berry-bright and seed.

The cycle turns from shade to light,

a river of bee-warm life,

to water our dreams

and make them grow.

 

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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

24 thoughts on “Prometheus Rose”

      1. There aren’t many rules to it, only that each side has the same number of lines and the ‘puente’ line works as the last line of the first part equally well as the first line of the second part, but leading to an opposing idea.

      2. Its still a challenge to not get lost in the writing . I failed english at school so there quite probably alot of writting techniques that im not familiar with .

      3. I’m not sure they teach writing techniques in schools. To write you just have to read, be literate and have a rich vocabulary. Reading shows you how other people do it. I’m always amazed at the number of ‘writers’ and ‘poets’ who misuse words, get the meaning wrong and the grammar mixed up. It’s like anything else, you can’t be a painter and not know which end of the paintbrush to use 🙂

      4. Punctuation and spelling are both difficult for me, i have always struggled with them . I tend to write from the heart and try and figure out the rest after the words are there.

      5. I don’t think punctuation is that important in a poem. I often use a line break instead of a comma, it’s obvious what the sense is. I have an automatic spell check turned on so usually it tells me what’s wrong and offers the right spelling. It helps a lot. I think you’re right to just let the words carry it. Time to worry about spelling when you publish.

      6. Thank you 🙂 I joined a group years ago that was essentially for wannabe writers helping us to get noticed and reviewed. There was a poetry section and a literature teacher/professor gave some of the poems a review. He gave me the confidence to post poetry on my blog and then submit to journals.
        Do you know https://dversepoets.com/ ? It’s a poetry group, prompts three times a week. Next one is Monday. It’s a good place if you need your confidence boosting because nobody ever says anything unpleasant. You’re more likely to get higher praise than the the poem deserves than get blasted out of the sky!

  1. I like this–wonderful contrast. And Prometheus! You’re right that we have similar messages today. I hadn’t intended to write Cassiopeia, but the Oracle must have been whispering. 🙂 And mine actually started out much darker, too, so if I had gone with it (maybe also with a puente) then they would have been even more similar in tone.

    1. Usually the Oracle writes the poem and I write the line that links the two (or three) but this time, she wrote the bridge line herself. As soon as I saw the last line of the first part, I knew it was leading to something else. These details that should surprise but don’t!

  2. I was just looking at the wheel of fortune tarot card this morning…this is very like a wheel turning. All elements can be used for good or ill or sometimes both at the same time. But nature (and the Oracle) knows that better than we do. (K)

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