Haiku challenge: Pure & Serene

A tanka for Ronovan’s weekly prompt.

Caillou High

this stream runs pure

trailing green boughs through

a desert

of naked earth tamed and still

beneath the relentless plough

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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

41 thoughts on “Haiku challenge: Pure & Serene”

    1. I’m so pleased you heard the message. It’s heartbreaking how little ‘natural’ space there is left. Green fields of crops are not at all the same as green forest, or even fields broken by green hedges. We grab every last little bit of the earth that we can use.

      1. It’s funny how you took exactly the opposite view to navasolanature 🙂 The image is the same, but we interpret it differently. I tend to have a very jaundiced opinion of farming in general.

      2. That’s true. Hahaha! It is interesting how people interpret people’s art. I had a similar effect when a couple of friends had their own interpretations of my Circle of Lies recording with the lyrics and usage of acousmatics. Is that opinion based on agribusiness running rampant or are there other factors?

      3. It’s not even agribusiness. It’s the whole ethic of production that has filtered down to even the tiny farms with just twenty or thirty hectares of land. They rip up all the hedges and copses, dam the watercourses and create a sterile, lifeless environment.

      4. I don’t either except what I see around me and what I read. We’re all going to have to be much more clued up about what our lifestyles imply for the planet. A lot of it is going to have to change.

      5. Sure. I agree that everyone needs to research those things like how much of a carbon footprint we leave or how much trash we put out that doesn’t have to go to the dumpster.

      6. It’s hard not to be aware of them though, when the news programmes are full of warnings, and scientific evidence of disasters in the making. I agree, most people prefer not to listen, which isn’t the same thing.
        I’ve stopped making excuses for ignorance. We’ve gone beyond the tolerance stage. I don’t want to die, or see things I care about die for ignorant slobs who refuses to make the slightest concession in their wasteful lifestyles.

      7. Right. I feel like the news over here talks about those things, but they are very downplayed when you consider big oil making a bunch of commercials. I certainly respect you for taking a stand on the environment.

      8. I’m sure the news does play it down. Environmental concerns directly impinge on the American way of life. It’s a lot easier to encourage the myth that if there’s a problem it’s the fault of the millions of poor people in the third world.

      9. Yeah and it’s mainly because of big oil and so many other companies. It’s inarguable by saying environmental concerns challenges American living. It’s just stupid when the media blames this on so many poorer nations. As if they would have enough power to leave massive carbon footprints. Funny enough, how is it that Kigali, Rwanda is cleaner than most American cities for example? At least they take the environment seriously in that country.

      10. Poor countries don’t consume. They’d like to, everyone aspires to the American and Saudi models of over-consumption, but poor countries don’t have the means. In a way, the poorest countries exploit the earth the only ways they can, by deforestation, destroying wildlife and pouring all their untreated waste directly into the water courses. So, on one level their attitude to their environment is the same as ours, it’s there to be exploited. We exploit on a massive scale though and do far more damage, produce too much unnecessary ‘stuff’, waste too much, eat too much, travel too much and generate too much rubbish.

      11. That’s certainly true. I could argue that it’s an after-effect of colonization for many of these nations all over the world where they want to be like those who formally conquered them (I just watched a 60s movie that dealt with those subjects and wrote the first draft of my review of said film, so this is fresh in my mind). Exploitation is certainly real, no matter where the pollution is. That or the richer nations dumping their garbage on poorer nations which is also a thing. I do applaud the Rwandans for cleaning up their country on a consistent basis to the point where people can actually eat near the gutters as I saw in one YouTube video from a Ghanaian visitor of that nation and how that country has a growing economic sector. Pollution is such a predatory practice, or dare I say parasitic.

      12. I’m always wary of the colonised/coloniser argument. Almost all the countries in the world have been colonised at one time or another. How far do you go back? All of South America was colonised by the Spaniards and Portuguese, North Africa was colonised by the Arabs, until the nineteenth century Bulgaria was colonised by the Turks, and Italy was colonised by the Spaniards and Austrians. After 900 years, the English still haven’t left Ireland. You can only ever blame so much on a colonial legacy. You have to look at what you kind of a society you want and often the barriers to a peaceful united country are ethnic, tribal and/or religious. People are complex and each group has its prejudices and bigotries. That’s one thing every society has in common.

      13. It was more in passing and I should’ve been specific when. In this case, I’m referring to nations who achieved independence in the 20th century more or less. While you had some pollution centuries ago, we can agree that the mess is nowhere near as big as what it has been for decades now. Call it the negative side of technological dualism, rampant climate change, or other factors. This wasteful behavior has been copied so much.

      14. Yes, it has. Basically, all people want more or less the same things. If they have a democratic government, the way resources are exploited is for the good of all (in theory). If they have corrupt governments, resources are creamed off by the elite and the people are kept miserable and poor. That’s valid just about everywhere.

    1. The chemicals and the fields without any hedges. I know our fields are tiny compared with the plains in the US or the Ukraine, but even a small field without any green refuge for the birds and animals is going to be a desert.

  1. What can i say? Here in Bavaria over the last decades we’d put all trees down. Now our famous primeminister says he will plant 30 million new trees. He doesnt say who will pay, even the selling of the harvested trees brought a lot of money.

    1. I’m never convinced by these promises to replant. Everyone knows they have no intention of replanting a forest, to let the trees grow to be hundreds of years old. They’ll plant a fast-growing crop in neat rows to make it easier for the machinery and chop it all down in fifteen years.

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