An off the cuff rhyming quadrille for the dverse prompt.
Wild is the wind and water white
and gusty stars on a windy night
and the fire that roars in the mountain’s maw
and claws unsheathed of a wildcat’s paw.
I left my heart in that wilderness,
in your open palms filled with tenderness.
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maw, claw and paw what wonderful rhymes…
My mind works in rhyme. It probably translates into a career where I’d make some money out of it, but I’ve never been able to discover what it is.
Your ‘off the cuff rhyming quadrille’ is full of imagery, Jane. I love the alliteration in the opening line and the ‘gusty stars’ are thrilling. I especially enjoyed the rhyming with the ‘aw’ sounds in the lines:
‘…the fire that roars in the mountain’s maw
and claws unsheathed of a wildcat’s paw’.
Thanks Kim. One of those spontaneous combustion poems. I should have been in advertising writing ditties.
Yours includes white water, and mine explicitly does not. Coincidence?
Or destiny? Your relationship with white water isn’t the same as mine. Yours is from first hand experience, mine is more imaginary 🙂
I do like the sight and sound of crashing waves. (safely from shore!)
Yep. The idea of being at the mercy of any of the elements terrifies me.
This should have a tune to it. It conjures up such great imagery.
It must be the effect of learning a lot of rhyming poetry when I was at an impressionable age.
I love a good rhyming quadrille. This one is awesome.
I’m pleased you like it, Linda. This one trotted out with no prompting. It happens with rhymes often.
Those are the best kind. 🙂
🙂
I love this so. The first line just sweeps me into the wildness. I love the rhyme, the unexpected imagery. The tenderness in the midst of all that wilderness is such a gorgeous place to land!
Thank you, Victoria! This one did just sweep along through the wild rhymes and ended just where it needed to. I’m pleased you liked it.
I love this Jane, the rhyming works so well.
Thank you, Linda. Sometimes that inner voice sings in rhyme 🙂
😊
I love the imagery and the rhymes. Gutsy stars is wonderful. 🙂
Thank you! I wrote ‘gusty’ stars but on reflection, ‘gutsy’ is just as good 🙂
Ah Jane….I read this once through silently…and then aloud. The patterning sounds and rhymes are wonderful. I was especially struck with these lines
“the fire that roars in the mountain’s maw
and claws unsheathed of a wildcat’s paw.”
Powerful imagery and wonderful sound.
Thank you, Lillian. I’m pleased you like the sound. Often the sound of the word is as important as its meaning.
I love the sense of flinging one’s heart in the direction of safe hands. You captured sense of the word ‘wild’ here perfectly.
Thanks Vivian 🙂
I like the thought of leaving one’s heart in the tenderness of the wilderness.
I wouldn’t trust it with most people 🙂
I LOVE this! Especially “claws unsheathed of a wildcat’s paw”. Wonderful!
Thank you, Sherry 🙂
“I left my heart in that wilderness,” Oh. how that speaks to me.
Thank you!
I love the progression, from wild to take. Nice!
Thank you, Mary 🙂
Enjoyable read. I especially like the rhyming pattern in this piece.
Thank you!
Your poem had a great rhyming scheme and I am fond of the use of rhyme. The use of claw and paw gave it that wild touch.
Thank you 🙂 I’m pleased you like the rhyme.
This is absolutely stunning! 💝 I resonate with; “I left my heart in that wilderness.”
Thank you! I’m pleased you like it, Sanaa.
love the sweetness!
Thank you!
Luv the rhyming mood. Have a good week
Much❤love
Thanks Gillena 🙂 Have a great week too 🙂
A beautiful reminder for us all to go back and enjoy the nature and also care for it. Love the rhyming scheme!
Thank you! I wish we would look after nature!
A sing-song effect. Love it.
“The fire that roars in the mountain’s maw.
Thank you!
It sounds so good to read aloud. The last line is gentle while the rest is wild (wildness of wilderness). A thoughtful as well as dramatic juxtaposition.
Perfect!
Thank you, Marie 🙂
The rhyme is wonderful. Thank you for sharing, Jane! Have a beautiful evening. Michael
You too, Michael and thank you 🙂
Love the rhythm of this one!
Thank you, Frank!