A knock on the street door in the night and we don’t answer. We look furtively through the louvred shutters and see nothing, nothing definite, but we know it’s there. You go to check the locks, I watch, see the faintest flutter of movement, a sliding up the wall of the building.
I want to call out to you but daren’t break the night silence. I don’t want to be alone and leave the window, looking for you. There are only two rooms in the apartment, and you are in neither of them.
The front door is unlocked. I fling it wide in panic and the darkness surges forward. I slam the door closed, lock it, pull across the bolt and I think I hear you calling, far away.
There is a creak, a gust of night air and I know a window has been opened. It’s there, in the bedroom. I back up against the apartment door. The bolt rattles, eases itself free. I watch mesmerised as the key turns by itself, clicks.
There is no point resisting.
I just hope it will be quick.
Frightening whether taken literally or metaphorically. I’m glad I didn’t read this right before bed. 😉
I’m writing a Gothic thriller at the moment, and felt in the mood 🙂
Cool! 🙂
🙂
This sounds great. Reading the first lines i thought its about a romantic date, or awaiting someone beloved. 😉 Michael
No, I’m dark at the moment. Nothing very bright and fluffy in my present writing.
Make your heart shining; Jane!
It could do with a spring clean 🙂
Frightening is the correct word.
So enjoyable.
I’m pleased you think so. I’m trying to sustain this kind of thing for the length of a novel.
Well made. The emotion of fearful chill was painted well with words. The despair in the end was a nice touch. Though, somehow there was expectation for it to turn around in the events.
Thank you! Maybe it’s hope dashed that has the greatest impact.
Suspense rises, then make it quick. The journey of the narrative is brief, intense, captivating.
I’m procrastinating. Something I’m good at. Shame it isn’t salaried.
Wow! That was intense.
Getting myself into the right mood. Do you ever try to frighten yourself when you write?
Nooo. I prefer non-scary stuff or it comes back in my dreams. 😂😂
It’s interesting trying to work out what is scary and what is just silly. Someone popping up from behind the sofa and shouting Boo! scares us stupid every time. I wonder why?
It’s the unexpected that always gets me.
Yes, and the imagined terrors rather than the gorey real ones.
A fantastic Ghost story 💜
Thanks Willow!
a pleasure 💜
🙂
Awesome. Whatever is entering that door, I’m glad I’m not there to see it. Well done.
Thank you! Me neither, except I suppose I was. Scared myself stupid with it 🙂
That was so captivating!! I really liked the way you were clearly able to portray what the characters felt and the imagery was created!
Thank you! I’m pleased you liked the story 🙂
That was brilliant! So vivid!
Thank you!
Very well written. You’ve got yourself another follower.
Thank you!