Gogyohka sequence for damselflies

Frank Tassone was kind enough to choose a poem of mine to feature as an example of the gogyohka form for the dverse prompt this evening. Thank you, Frank. Here are three more.

 

silver the pool

pewter the sky

and in the golden dust of bedstraw

the damsels fly

on wings colour of sunsets

 

heat and damselflies hover

hanging

light as sunbeams among the alders

water-dipping in the dark cool of tree shadow

jewels

 

sun and water and deep tree shade

the stray ray that falls

the flash like coloured lightning

of lace wings dipped in sapphire

kingfisher insect sips the light

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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

63 thoughts on “Gogyohka sequence for damselflies”

  1. Beautifully written Jane, I love those ‘lace wings dipped in sapphire’ ๐Ÿ’™

  2. Beautiful thrice over, each stanza as bright as the other. I, too, was hooked by those “lace wings .”

  3. Thank you for your inspiring series.

    The better wealth of colors is in nature.
    Air and water still are best found in nature.
    Nature’s light and shadow are better than anything we make.

      1. No. I just looked it up though, and it’s a flower that I asked about on FB. I guess it’s also called Star of Bethlehem. 11 O’Clock Ladies is definitely a more interesting name!

      2. It’s close. They’re both Ornithogalum, Star of Bethlehem is Arabium (round petals) and Eleven o’clock ladies is Umbellatum (pointed petals).
        So now you know ๐Ÿ™‚

  4. Just delicious summer sounds in all three – I particularly liked how you slowed the flow in the last with ‘the stray ray that falls’ & that wonderfully awkward last line – ‘kingfisher insect sips the light’ – a poem in itself. (it’s a howling gale here, so reading this is a ray of sunshine)

    1. Thanks Peter! You’re slipping into winter I guess. Spring has gone and it’s summer here, and there are loads of damselflies along the stream, even a kingfisher occasionally. They seem to live on sunlight. I’m pleased you liked these.

  5. A stunning damselfly Gogyohka sequence, Jane. I love the contrast of the metallic colours of pool, sky and bedstraw, and then the splash of โ€˜wings colour of sunsetsโ€™. You created tension with the hovering heat and damselflies, and the added emphasis of the isolated words โ€˜hangingโ€™ and โ€˜jewelsโ€™. The final stanza relaxes so beautifully into light with โ€˜the stray ray that fallsโ€™ and then the sapphire, I felt myself exhaling with pleasure.

  6. Dappled light especially when its refleted in water is one of my favorite sights thats what isaw moving behind the images and felt a summer’s afternoon delight in doing nothing but gaze…

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