Haibun for stargazing

For the dverse prompt.

The most crowded place in the Milky Way

The night sky is always there though often veiled with cloud or rain, sometimes oranged with glare, sometimes floodlit by full-sailed moon, but the nights of no cloud, no rain, no moon, away from the orange stain that seeps skyward from the unsleeping town, are the nights to be swept into the net of the universe.

Soaring, we reach out to the million million blinking lights of the starcrusted sky, Milky Way spilt and pale, and the great fiery beacons that hold our spellbound gaze, until we see nothing but layers of light, hear nothing but leaves falling.

sky so high
and hung with lights and the dark
with fox-bark

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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

50 thoughts on “Haibun for stargazing”

      1. I saw Orion this morning! I looked up and saw the stars over my neighbor’s house–and something in my mind (was it you?) said those are the stars of his belt. And then I checked it on my phone app to make sure. 😀

  1. It’s such a shame that the ‘wonders’ of the modern world so often blot out the wonders of the night sky. You’ve managed to capture those wonders here, nevertheless.

    1. I don’t understand the rapture people go into over city illuminations. The glare stops them seeing the stars, and if they ever looked at the stars, they’d see how feeble electric lights are in comparison.

  2. I love how you considered the different types of sky in the first paragraph, the veils of cloud and rain, the oranged glare, floodlight of a full-sailed moon – I found myself looking out of the window to see what we have tonight, hoping to be ‘swept into the net of the universe’. The second paragraph is like a psychedelic journey into space – I found myself humming Hawkwind’s ‘Silver Machine’. And I agree with Sarah about the fox bark – it did indeed bring back to earth!

  3. I liked “the great fiery beacons that hold our spellbound gaze, until we see nothing but layers of light, hear nothing but leaves falling.”; damned good poetics!

  4. Psychedelic indeed, JD; I think I became weightless there for a second or two, really spaced out but thank God that the fox-bark reeled me in. Love this work.

  5. You took my breath away with this one, Jane! I love the image; “until we see nothing but layers of light, hear nothing but leaves falling.” 💝💝

  6. A wonderful write Jane! Your imagery is so excellent! Sweeping the night skies into the net of the universe …. and the Milky Way spilt and pale.. You could have titled this on Mesmerized!!

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