Ugly weather over the palace

A 42 poem (the rules are here) for the dverse open link night.



Into the dark they go, but what will they find?

The goading with false promises and false crimes
by false prophets has filled them full of lies.

The dark clings like slick oil and fills the mouth and ears;
there are no pearls that gleam in these blind depths,
and if there were, they would be cast before swine.

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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

48 thoughts on “Ugly weather over the palace”

  1. You have invented your own form – that’s impressive! I can feel your anger and frustration seething through all that ‘slick oil’ here.

  2. “The dark clings like slick oil and fills the mouth and ears,”.. this is so evocative. The angst is palpable here.

  3. Intrigued by the form! I like the biblical reference with the pearls and swine. The story is a cautionary tale. I like the dark imagery of slick oil, for he is very slick!

  4. Jane,
    These lines jumped out at me,
    The goading with false promises and false crimes
    by false prophets has filled them full of lies.

    The lies and lies and lies. Oh my.

  5. slouching towards Bethlehem?

    This is obviously a response to current events – and I usually brace myself for those – but you’ve written a proper poem that has a powerful resonance.

    Hope that sounds as positive as I feel. You know, at poetry readings, when someone stands up and says “I wrote this poem this morning, because of something I saw on the news last night” – it’s always a worry.

  6. An interesting new form – I’m a Douglas Adams fan, so it really appeals to me, Jane, and the question is pertinent. The lines that stand out for me:
    ‘there are no pearls that gleam in these blind depths,
    and if there were, they would be cast before swine’.

  7. Love the power of this piece Jane — and it jabs right at the heart if the matter. “The dark clings like slick oil and fills the mouth and ears”, indeed, and sadly so. Find your 42 concept most interesting. Think I’ll have a go it soon.

  8. no pearls indeed. The world is still beautiful, just too much ugliness too. loving your form too. Nice tip of the hat to Adams, to make a form that actually contains an answer. 😉

    1. Thanks Lona.
      The world is always beautiful, as you say. Only the people in it (not all) are ugly.

      It’s frustrating to be forever asking questions and finding no answer to give. Here’s the form that solves the problem 🙂

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