This was the form Paul Brookes chose last week. The structure of the trimeric is simple, three of the four lines of the first stanza repeated in a cascade, heading each successive stanza. Trimeric poems tend to be short and imagist (as in my first poem), but there’s no reason why they can’t be denser (second poem). I enjoyed this form and will probably use it again.
January, early morning
Night is over,
light frozen at grey dawn,
a stopped clock,
its mechanism rusted.
Light frozen at grey dawn
hangs in mist wreaths
over frozen puddles,
a stopped clock
in a silent room, where
ash fills the hearth.
Its mechanism rusted,
this year grinds on,
drenched in fog.
Turn of the year
The world grinds on its hinges
with the rusty creak of rainswept trees,
black and dripping with winter,
and birds sing to ward against the cold.
With the rusty creak of windswept trees,
rain-light ruffles feathers,
ships tossed on stormy seas,
black and dripping with winter.
Horizons close, veiled in water,
endless tracts of grey,
and birds sing to ward against the cold,
to spell spring’s return and
ease the earth’s rumbling course.
Reblogged this on The Wombwell Rainbow.
I like them both–same story told differently.
You reminded me that I had wanted to try this form. 🙂
Yes, the weather is uppermost in my mind 🙂
Do try it out. It doesn’t tie your brain in knots like some of the previous forms.
I will try it. I just got busy last week and forgot about it.
I like this form too–similar to a cascade. And both poems capture the current weather patterns, seemingly everywhere. (K)
I like the simplicity of the form, that allows you to make it more interesting by making something different with the repeated line.
I love weather. Even better, I love poems about weather. You’ve given me both.
I’d gladly give you some of this weather. To keep. No backsies 🙂
We’re still sub-zero down here, and Glasgow is 10C tomorrow. The world is topsy-turvy.
It is. Same here, -4/+2° for the last three days and nights and 8/9° in the north.