Merril’s prosery prompt for dverse included the line: Against the blue cloth of the sky.
I haven’t written a prosery, but I’ve borrowed the line to use in a mirrored refrain poem.
Star dancing
These slothful summer evenings slide
Into the night where they belong,
Against the blue cloth of the sky,
While stars dance slows the whole night long.
The circles, cycles shorten as
The days; the months, the years fly by,
While stars dance slows the whole night long,
Against the blue cloth of the sky.
We hear the raven, hear the owl,
The riverโs roar, the blackbirdโs song,
Against the blue cloth of the sky,
While stars dance slows the whole night long.
The rising moonโs a disco ball;
I take your hand, the poplars sigh,
While stars dance slows the whole night long,
Against the blue cloth of the sky.
Lovely!
Thank you!
This is beautiful, Jane. I love your refrain.
It’s weird, but I had Irish pipes playing in the background of my mind movie (while reading–you understand), and even though you wrote river, I saw a beach and sea.
Thank you! I love the sound of the pipes, and I’m pleased you heard them in this. It wasn’t intentional, but the ballady effect brings them in ๐
I guess my mind-movie needed a soundtrack. ๐
You chose a good one ๐
My subconscious. ๐
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Perfect! All is acting together. xx Michael
Thank you. Yes, you’re right xx
Thank you, Jane! :-)) xx Michael
So beautiful…
Thank you ๐
You have so many forms that you play while I mostly freeform my words to get them to say what is felt. Simply smashing Jane.
I’m glad you like this! Sometimes/often I think in rhythm and the rhyme seems to follow naturally. All I have to do is go back and tweak ๐
For some the magic is in the surprise of freeform. “Wow who wrote that!” Whoops it was me. ๐
Yes! We don’t often write memorable lines, but just sometimes, we can believe we really are poets ๐
So lovely, Jane. I love Merrilโs phrase, tooโฆ that blue cloth of sky, kind of describes it perfectly! โค๏ธ
Thank you ๐
You’re welcome. โค