The Answerers

For the dverse prompt. One of my maternal grandmother’s favourite poems, and one that we learned in the primary school. I still love the mystery and the rhythm. I took the text from the Poetry Foundation.

The Listeners by Walter de la Mare

‘Is there anybody there?’ said the Traveller,
   Knocking on the moonlit door;
And his horse in the silence champed the grasses
   Of the forest’s ferny floor:
And a bird flew up out of the turret,
   Above the Traveller’s head:
And he smote upon the door again a second time;
   ‘Is there anybody there?’ he said.
But no one descended to the Traveller;
   No head from the leaf-fringed sill
Leaned over and looked into his grey eyes,
   Where he stood perplexed and still.
But only a host of phantom listeners
   That dwelt in the lone house then
Stood listening in the quiet of the moonlight
   To that voice from the world of men:
Stood thronging the faint moonbeams on the dark stair,
   That goes down to the empty hall,
Hearkening in an air stirred and shaken
   By the lonely Traveller’s call.
And he felt in his heart their strangeness,
   Their stillness answering his cry,
While his horse moved, cropping the dark turf,
   ’Neath the starred and leafy sky;
For he suddenly smote on the door, even
   Louder, and lifted his head:—
‘Tell them I came, and no one answered,
   That I kept my word,’ he said.
Never the least stir made the listeners,
   Though every word he spake
Fell echoing through the shadowiness of the still house
   From the one man left awake:
Ay, they heard his foot upon the stirrup,
   And the sound of iron on stone,
And how the silence surged softly backward,
   When the plunging hoofs were gone.

 

And my response in the words of the Listeners.

 


We waited though nights were endless,

And the sun seemed never to shine,

We waited though soldiers trampled

Through the fields that were ours and thine,

“Come back,” but never you answered,

Our voices grew weak and frail,

And we passed from this world of sadness,

Beyond this life’s tremulous veil.

Our thoughts and our hopes were with you,

Though you never answered our call,

Through the days and nights of hardship,

Spent behind stout door and wall,

“Come back,” we called when they found us,

The soldiers who took us away,

They who took our lives and tossed them

Into darkness where they stay.

“Come back.” Listen to our last pleading,

We swear by the moon, stars and sun,

That we’ll wait for you on this dark hillside,

Until all of your days are done.

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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

64 thoughts on “The Answerers”

  1. What a compelling piece you present! Leaving the lone stranger unknown, perhaps a soldier from the original band who left and could not hear our pleas to return when day is done! Hope I did not miss it to far??
    Dwight

    1. I don’t know the story behind the poem, Dwight. In my mind I set it somewhere Spanish Civil Warish, but it was written before the first world war. It’s simply mysterious, and has always intrigued me.

      1. Helen Hay Whitney was from the Whitney family of NY. She was a poet, breeder of race horses. and a philanthropist. Born in the late 1800, she died in 1944. Thanks Jane for your comment.

  2. The listeners turned answerers…we travelers need talk less and listen more, I think. Excellent choice of poem, Jane, with poignant response.

  3. Such a ghostly poem and even ghostlier response, arch in the manner of de la Mare’s high romantic verse, carrying in its hearse a nod to Keat’s “La Belle Dams San Merci” — a rich, pregnant tell of ancient singing. What of the Traveller who never returns, or does so too late? The longing never leaves though the resident facts do, diminishing like the Cumaean Sibyl, who after being granted a thousand years of life was then doomed to waste away for that long (having refused Apollo’s advance). (See Larry Levis “Elegy With A Thimbleful of Water in the Cage”) Anyway, the sad haunting refrain is bone-deep and has been echoing perhaps forever. Loved it.

  4. Thank you! You opened up the original poem to me, and I got to see what is inherent in the English expression “left behind”. Being educated to be a soldier, I have thought of it in terms of “behind enemy lines”. Your poem, in light of the original, is heartbreaking.

    1. Your explanation of the origin of the expression ‘to be left behind’ is an interesting one. I don’t know much military history, but I imagine the idea of ‘lines’ doesn’t go back very far beyond the beginnings of trench warfare. Being left on a battlefield at all would have been the kiss of death for any fallen soldier in older times, I’d have thought. This poem has always made me imagine a family transported or massacred by an occupying army. There is no animosity in though, the phantoms are passive and calm. Only the traveller seems to need to justify himself, guilty conscience I suspect. I’m glad you enjoyed the poem 🙂

      1. I too believe the origin of the expression is civilian, not military. And you made me see that being “left behind” indeed is challenging, whatever circumstance. Thinking of it now, I wonder if the expression is originally American. Immigrants.

      2. Not sure if it would be American. There have been migratory movements of English-speaking populations since long before emigration to America. Only a small percentage of immigrants were anglophone anyway. Certainly it would probably have been the men who looked back wistfully at those they ‘left behind’. I don’t suppose the people who stayed thought of themselves as being left behind.

  5. gave me goosebumps Jane but then your poems almost always have that effect. I could taste the sadness and hopelessness of the Listeners lament in your response poem. You are brilliant you know, it was a perfect echo of the original poem of someone coming to call yet none responded, maybe waiting in a different dimension I seem to get that from de la Mare’s original and your response, like a spell keeping them from seeing and hearing each other. Very imaginative yet true to form.

    1. I think you grasped what he was trying to do, with the traveller out of touch with the world of the listeners. The horse and the bird weren’t troubled by the ghosts, and the ghosts were tranquil enough too, only the traveller seemed intent on making a noise and justifying himself. Why? I’d love to know. I’m pleased you liked this, Gina 🙂

      1. it was very good Jane and so connected to the original, response poetry is tricky as sometimes the essence of the original is lost but you continued with the aura of the first. I am still thinking why the traveler behaved as such, being in a different dimension comes to mind first! well done Jane!

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  6. Hi.. Jane.. thanks for the Dance
    and Song Echo of Words for it is true
    Poetry
    is heart
    and soul
    and spirit
    that connects as
    i spent 25 Years working
    for the government in analyzing
    this and that and left reasons behind
    turning to dance and song to live..
    first i visited
    reason
    land online
    to leave reason
    then i became a dance
    and song and visited rhyme
    land and surprisingly found that
    many poems do not care to communicate
    with other poems.. hehe.. yes in literal terms
    of this.. my favorite form of poetry in echoing
    reality all of reality back as dance and song
    As Ocean Whole..
    anyway.. i actually
    echoed poetry
    like this through
    every single prompt and
    every single link on the
    dVerse Poetry trail for an
    entire year from April 2015
    through March of 2016.. 338,630
    words of effort that i consolidated into
    one ‘MacroVerse’ of one long form poem
    as part of what is approaching 6 Million Words
    on my 58th Birthday on June 6th in the 58th Month of one entire
    Long Form Poem i name “SonG oF mY SoUL”.. just literally and
    metaphorically for no other rhyme but the continued growth
    of my soul.. for it is true the more poetry we become pArt
    of by joining it in dance and song the more eternal
    now is in colors beyond infinity.. and
    since all there is
    is now
    what
    higher
    holy and
    sacred purpose
    of meaning as is
    could there be than
    Dance and Song.. true.. considering
    overpopulation too an alternative option
    to
    re-create
    to upload
    a soul to move
    to connect to co-create..
    i have come across literally Hundreds of Thousands
    of Souls both in real life working with the public one
    on one for two decades and now a consecutive 2615
    days writing somewhere around 12 Million Words
    and interacting directly and vicariously with
    who knows maybe a half a million people
    as i read really fast and type really
    fast too.. Autistic with Asperger’s
    Syndrome and Bi-Polar too
    no surprise either of
    which for
    poetry/art/
    science of
    for the ages
    and the sages too..
    anyway.. i find you as a very
    special and unique soul for
    you heard the traveler’s call
    and really really
    responded
    my
    friEnd.. i thank you
    for that and now i will leave
    you be in the life you lead for as you
    might imagine other wise this poem will go on
    with no end for with me the dance and song is
    a never
    ending
    always
    beginning
    never land story my FriEnd..
    true though you’ll see me down
    the trail for sure next time i visit the dVerse list that includes you
    too.. meanwhile i am currently writing an ongoing free verse effort
    of what i name as three King James Plus Sized Effort ‘Bibles’ for like
    the original words of a Gnostic so-called Jesus i see Nature as
    God and
    we the
    eyes of
    Nature’s Breath
    as what may be
    found in a cord of
    wood split.. in two..
    when as/in the Force
    oF A BaLanCinG AcT oF LoVE
    as Mountains that/who can and will be Love
    standing
    uPoN
    A Grand
    oF SanD as God no less no more
    than Breath of Life.. for the struggle
    it took to get here.. the least i can do is
    say thanks this way to all my Ancestors
    And Nature as God that who still lives on….NoW..
    hehe.. i rub most ‘religious folks’ ‘the wrong way’
    hehe but in reality
    making now all of
    LiFE dArk thru LiGHT
    holy and sacred full
    of meaning and purpose
    i am very possibly one of the
    most religious folks to ever walk the
    earth.. hehe.. at least in literal word
    count of Free Verse Longest Form Poetry and Bible
    Writing
    A 6 Million
    Word coming soon “SonG oF
    mY SoUL”.. Longest Long Form Poem Bible for just me and all that is..
    plus there is only now and one only turns 58 once always now too..
    And considering it took me 53 years to start writing poetry and
    i’ve been doing this for 53 months to this point and i
    was born on
    6660
    it all
    just
    seems
    all comfy and fitting together darklight
    warm and fuzzy and the such as that too..
    but hey in comic book lore.. “Hell Boy II” didn’t
    start his ‘super hero’ career until age 53 either..
    so late
    bloomer
    devil and angel too..
    true we all make life what is my friEnd
    Hell or Heaven both are here NoW for
    all our reasons and rhymes..
    As ‘they’ say may you
    live in interesting times
    so
    lucky
    am i
    to take full advantage
    of all that is i am and will Be
    with LoVE
    but true
    nothing
    truly fun comes free..
    for the dark and pain and numb
    brings the light and pleasure of beyond rainbow colors..
    Anyway.. i’m pretty sure why it is that so many poets are
    Bi-Polar is they are a ‘chosen’ Naturally evolved few who
    have seen/heard
    within
    hell
    and
    heaven
    up close
    and personal
    in the same lifetime
    my friend.. for it is true
    the pain and numb as devil
    in hell is all the perspective that brings
    heaven now..
    @least
    to me..
    if this is what it takes
    it’s a fair guess that even
    demons would fear to tread
    where i’ve been.. now and
    others too.. potentially
    even more or less
    so Heaven
    can
    and will be a lonely place too allone.
    Thanks again for the cAll bacK
    WitH SMiLes..
    And
    yes
    long
    WiNks.. ButterflieS AnD
    Synchronicities reLeaseD
    And unLeAsheD..
    iN affect
    oF
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