For the dverse prompt. One of my maternal grandmother’s favourite poems, and one that we learned in the primary school. I still love the mystery and the rhythm. I took the text from the Poetry Foundation.
The Listeners by Walter de la Mare
We waited though nights were endless,
And the sun seemed never to shine,
We waited though soldiers trampled
Through the fields that were ours and thine,
“Come back,” but never you answered,
Our voices grew weak and frail,
And we passed from this world of sadness,
Beyond this life’s tremulous veil.
Our thoughts and our hopes were with you,
Though you never answered our call,
Through the days and nights of hardship,
Spent behind stout door and wall,
“Come back,” we called when they found us,
The soldiers who took us away,
They who took our lives and tossed them
Into darkness where they stay.
“Come back.” Listen to our last pleading,
We swear by the moon, stars and sun,
That we’ll wait for you on this dark hillside,
Until all of your days are done.
The tone is enhanced by that lovely repetition; you have echoed and answered this so beautifully, Jane! I am silenced by the profound feeling in your words.
I don’t do it justice, but I’ve enjoyed attempting to give a voice to the Listeners.
Personally, I thought yours the better of the two.
Now that compliment leaves me gobsmacked! Can I frame it, please? I’m so glad you like it 🙂
Frame it in gold, Jane. I’m not the type to say something that grandiose without meaning it.
I’m truly humbled.
Your poem is coloured with the same solemnity as the original, Jane. An accomplished response.
I’m glad you like it Kim. I might try and write a better response when I have more time.
I think you hit it, Jane. It rings true to the original in every line.
I’m pleased you think so, Charley. It’s a poem I’ve loved since I was small, full of mystery and such a vivid tableau.
Indeed. Well, you caught it!
Cheers!
Beautiful!!
Thank you! I’m pleased the response didn’t fall so far short of the original as to be embarrassing 🙂
I agree with Jilly. Your response was better than the question asked, and lots easier to read
I’m very pleased you think so, Walter 🙂
😀
Beautiful call and response poems Jane ~ Love the different perspective from each poem ~
Thanks Grace. It’s a poem that begs an answer, though the mystery has to remain intact.
Haunting is not only the plead of the ghosts but how seamlessly you listened to and answered the poem by de la Mare.
Thank you, Amaya. It’s a poem I have always loved, and I can see the picture so clearly.
What a compelling piece you present! Leaving the lone stranger unknown, perhaps a soldier from the original band who left and could not hear our pleas to return when day is done! Hope I did not miss it to far??
Dwight
I don’t know the story behind the poem, Dwight. In my mind I set it somewhere Spanish Civil Warish, but it was written before the first world war. It’s simply mysterious, and has always intrigued me.
Helen Hay Whitney was from the Whitney family of NY. She was a poet, breeder of race horses. and a philanthropist. Born in the late 1800, she died in 1944. Thanks Jane for your comment.
OOPs!! I thought you were commenting on my post!! You can delete both of these! So sorry.
Dwight
That’s okay, Dwight. No information is ever wasted 🙂
The listeners turned answerers…we travelers need talk less and listen more, I think. Excellent choice of poem, Jane, with poignant response.
I’m glad you like the poem, Lynn, it’s a favourite of mine 🙂
Such a ghostly poem and even ghostlier response, arch in the manner of de la Mare’s high romantic verse, carrying in its hearse a nod to Keat’s “La Belle Dams San Merci” — a rich, pregnant tell of ancient singing. What of the Traveller who never returns, or does so too late? The longing never leaves though the resident facts do, diminishing like the Cumaean Sibyl, who after being granted a thousand years of life was then doomed to waste away for that long (having refused Apollo’s advance). (See Larry Levis “Elegy With A Thimbleful of Water in the Cage”) Anyway, the sad haunting refrain is bone-deep and has been echoing perhaps forever. Loved it.
Thanks so much, Brendan. I’m pleased you don’t think I marred the original which is one of my favourite poems.
This is so lovely, Jane. I am awed.
It’s a poem my grandma used to teach her class of eight and nine year olds, and one that I learned by heart because I loved it.
❤
Nice metrical sound tied together with the waiting at the end.
Thank you, Frank 🙂
Beautiful. You gave them a voice but maintained the mystery that makes the original so mesmerizing.
Thank you! I’m glad you found the poem intriguing too.
I can sense how the poem has worked under your skin so you actually relive it and deliver such stellar response… well done.
Thank you, Bjorn. It’s true, I feel as though I was there, without actually knowing who these people are or what they are remembering.
So haunting and vivid! A perfect response! Great write, Jane! 🙂
Thank you, Frank 🙂
Thank you! You opened up the original poem to me, and I got to see what is inherent in the English expression “left behind”. Being educated to be a soldier, I have thought of it in terms of “behind enemy lines”. Your poem, in light of the original, is heartbreaking.
Your explanation of the origin of the expression ‘to be left behind’ is an interesting one. I don’t know much military history, but I imagine the idea of ‘lines’ doesn’t go back very far beyond the beginnings of trench warfare. Being left on a battlefield at all would have been the kiss of death for any fallen soldier in older times, I’d have thought. This poem has always made me imagine a family transported or massacred by an occupying army. There is no animosity in though, the phantoms are passive and calm. Only the traveller seems to need to justify himself, guilty conscience I suspect. I’m glad you enjoyed the poem 🙂
I too believe the origin of the expression is civilian, not military. And you made me see that being “left behind” indeed is challenging, whatever circumstance. Thinking of it now, I wonder if the expression is originally American. Immigrants.
Not sure if it would be American. There have been migratory movements of English-speaking populations since long before emigration to America. Only a small percentage of immigrants were anglophone anyway. Certainly it would probably have been the men who looked back wistfully at those they ‘left behind’. I don’t suppose the people who stayed thought of themselves as being left behind.
gave me goosebumps Jane but then your poems almost always have that effect. I could taste the sadness and hopelessness of the Listeners lament in your response poem. You are brilliant you know, it was a perfect echo of the original poem of someone coming to call yet none responded, maybe waiting in a different dimension I seem to get that from de la Mare’s original and your response, like a spell keeping them from seeing and hearing each other. Very imaginative yet true to form.
I think you grasped what he was trying to do, with the traveller out of touch with the world of the listeners. The horse and the bird weren’t troubled by the ghosts, and the ghosts were tranquil enough too, only the traveller seemed intent on making a noise and justifying himself. Why? I’d love to know. I’m pleased you liked this, Gina 🙂
it was very good Jane and so connected to the original, response poetry is tricky as sometimes the essence of the original is lost but you continued with the aura of the first. I am still thinking why the traveler behaved as such, being in a different dimension comes to mind first! well done Jane!
Well, I’m immensely pleased (and proud!) that you think so! Thank you 🙂
A stunning response I enjoyed the read!
Thank you, Bekkie! I’m pleased you enjoyed the poems.
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A SoUL
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Forgotten
Love A Price to:
Bleed no Longer
Wars From: Love..:)
Virgin soil
upturned
in search of soul
buried beneath
the blood and bones
found by love
cherished
by lovers.
Thank you 🙂
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If every spirit
had a thought
and every thought
was a word
threaded in a chain
we would join our spirits
together—
a long
unbreakable chain
of
humanity.
🙂
Poetry
Come
To
Be
AGaiN..:)
Never goes away 🙂
Continuing
To: Be From:
SMiLes..:)
🙂 🙂 🙂
Apollonian
WinKs
Bees
And
Butterfly
Effects
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Rarely
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Lisa
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ConTesT
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Watcher.. SMiLes
For the Longer
Version
See
BaBeL
By Mumford
And Suns
Who
Echo
An
Oldest
Longest
Poem
Of
ALWaYs
NoW..
WitH
SWaY..
And
SonG..:)
This is so exactly how it is here today—lizards and butterflies and sunshine 🙂
Hi.. Jane.. thanks for the Dance
and Song Echo of Words for it is true
Poetry
is heart
and soul
and spirit
that connects as
i spent 25 Years working
for the government in analyzing
this and that and left reasons behind
turning to dance and song to live..
first i visited
reason
land online
to leave reason
then i became a dance
and song and visited rhyme
land and surprisingly found that
many poems do not care to communicate
with other poems.. hehe.. yes in literal terms
of this.. my favorite form of poetry in echoing
reality all of reality back as dance and song
As Ocean Whole..
anyway.. i actually
echoed poetry
like this through
every single prompt and
every single link on the
dVerse Poetry trail for an
entire year from April 2015
through March of 2016.. 338,630
words of effort that i consolidated into
one ‘MacroVerse’ of one long form poem
as part of what is approaching 6 Million Words
on my 58th Birthday on June 6th in the 58th Month of one entire
Long Form Poem i name “SonG oF mY SoUL”.. just literally and
metaphorically for no other rhyme but the continued growth
of my soul.. for it is true the more poetry we become pArt
of by joining it in dance and song the more eternal
now is in colors beyond infinity.. and
since all there is
is now
what
higher
holy and
sacred purpose
of meaning as is
could there be than
Dance and Song.. true.. considering
overpopulation too an alternative option
to
re-create
to upload
a soul to move
to connect to co-create..
i have come across literally Hundreds of Thousands
of Souls both in real life working with the public one
on one for two decades and now a consecutive 2615
days writing somewhere around 12 Million Words
and interacting directly and vicariously with
who knows maybe a half a million people
as i read really fast and type really
fast too.. Autistic with Asperger’s
Syndrome and Bi-Polar too
no surprise either of
which for
poetry/art/
science of
for the ages
and the sages too..
anyway.. i find you as a very
special and unique soul for
you heard the traveler’s call
and really really
responded
my
friEnd.. i thank you
for that and now i will leave
you be in the life you lead for as you
might imagine other wise this poem will go on
with no end for with me the dance and song is
a never
ending
always
beginning
never land story my FriEnd..
true though you’ll see me down
the trail for sure next time i visit the dVerse list that includes you
too.. meanwhile i am currently writing an ongoing free verse effort
of what i name as three King James Plus Sized Effort ‘Bibles’ for like
the original words of a Gnostic so-called Jesus i see Nature as
God and
we the
eyes of
Nature’s Breath
as what may be
found in a cord of
wood split.. in two..
when as/in the Force
oF A BaLanCinG AcT oF LoVE
as Mountains that/who can and will be Love
standing
uPoN
A Grand
oF SanD as God no less no more
than Breath of Life.. for the struggle
it took to get here.. the least i can do is
say thanks this way to all my Ancestors
And Nature as God that who still lives on….NoW..
hehe.. i rub most ‘religious folks’ ‘the wrong way’
hehe but in reality
making now all of
LiFE dArk thru LiGHT
holy and sacred full
of meaning and purpose
i am very possibly one of the
most religious folks to ever walk the
earth.. hehe.. at least in literal word
count of Free Verse Longest Form Poetry and Bible
Writing
A 6 Million
Word coming soon “SonG oF
mY SoUL”.. Longest Long Form Poem Bible for just me and all that is..
plus there is only now and one only turns 58 once always now too..
And considering it took me 53 years to start writing poetry and
i’ve been doing this for 53 months to this point and i
was born on
6660
it all
just
seems
all comfy and fitting together darklight
warm and fuzzy and the such as that too..
but hey in comic book lore.. “Hell Boy II” didn’t
start his ‘super hero’ career until age 53 either..
so late
bloomer
devil and angel too..
true we all make life what is my friEnd
Hell or Heaven both are here NoW for
all our reasons and rhymes..
As ‘they’ say may you
live in interesting times
so
lucky
am i
to take full advantage
of all that is i am and will Be
with LoVE
but true
nothing
truly fun comes free..
for the dark and pain and numb
brings the light and pleasure of beyond rainbow colors..
Anyway.. i’m pretty sure why it is that so many poets are
Bi-Polar is they are a ‘chosen’ Naturally evolved few who
have seen/heard
within
hell
and
heaven
up close
and personal
in the same lifetime
my friend.. for it is true
the pain and numb as devil
in hell is all the perspective that brings
heaven now..
@least
to me..
if this is what it takes
it’s a fair guess that even
demons would fear to tread
where i’ve been.. now and
others too.. potentially
even more or less
so Heaven
can
and will be a lonely place too allone.
Thanks again for the cAll bacK
WitH SMiLes..
And
yes
long
WiNks.. ButterflieS AnD
Synchronicities reLeaseD
And unLeAsheD..
iN affect
oF
effect..:)
Thank you for letting me join in your dance for a while. They all touch and weave in and out of one another if we let them. Stay happy 🙂
🙂