A second poem for the dverse prompt attempting a contrast of mood in the two halves.
Dark clouds never encumbered our skies
Rain-bearing winds were balmy and soft
Clustered like crows feathered omens
Glowering they promised fierce joy
Over a heap petaled and sweet-scented
Of carrion nurtured earth.
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This is fabulous Jane it reads three ways💜
Thanks Willow! I’m glad it works!
It does brilliantly 😀
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Love this so much.
Thank you, Mita!
I love the juxtaposition!
I’m glad it worked for you 🙂
I liked the description of crows as “feathered omens” clustering.
Thank you, Frank 🙂
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Short and effective! Nicely done Jane!
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Thank you, Hank 🙂
I’m with Frank. Great description of the (cloud) crows.
Thank you 🙂 I tried to make them seem both sweet and fluffy and sinister.
I love the ‘feathered omens’, Jane!
Thanks Kim 🙂
The darkness works so well here.
Thanks Bjorn 🙂 That’s what I was hoping for.
Hey, never read before a “three way readable” poem. Thank you! Michael
Tricky things to write!
Think so Jane! Well done! Michael
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I like the imagery here…for me the ‘third’ might work better with encumbering…just a thought, as the first line of poem two doesn’t sit quite right with me as an opener.
Hmm. It changes the meaning though. If I’d been using punctuation, which you can’t really with this kind of poem, I’d have put a comma in the first line: never encumbered, our skies,
winds were always balmy and soft.
‘encumbering’ gives an opposite meaning.
Of course. I should have spotted the invisible comma. Obvious when you point it out x
It’s one of the drawbacks of this kind of poem—when you add any punctuation it all falls apart, and if you don’t add any…it all falls apart…
Wow! Different moods and tones indeed. Well done!
It adds a bit of interest if the two sides are contrasts, like a medieval triptych 🙂