I saw this photo prompt on Lynn Love’s blog and a story immediately sprang to mind. If you too feel inspired, here’s the link to the Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers prompt.
The photo is courtesy of Tim Livingston (the Forester Artist)
A long time itโs been here, nights and nights and more nights. Still the smell hangs in the air like death. Mice come here now and birds. Mice and birds donโt know much, donโt smell death. Not like us. Us knows.
Men comed here over and over in the thing, comed stomping with death in their hands. Us would run and hide. Birds didnโt. Birds is stupid, donโt know to hide. Us sawed what happened to birds. Then one time, earth opened and breathed, enough. Us heard. Men didnโt. Earth opened and menโs thing tumbled inside. They left it there, caught in earthโs jaws. Us waited and waited nights and nights and more nights. But the thing was dead.
Mice come here now and birds. Mice and birds donโt remember anything. Us remembers. Us stays away. Except when us is hungry and us remembers scampering stupid mice. Quick snap snap snap. Blood and tiny squeals. Then us runs away back to the safe earth.
A long time itโs been here. Still it smells of death.
So many things to love … The voice, the sour dank feeling it evokes, the delight in nature doling out justice. I loved it
I’m glad you like it. I enjoy being a vixen sometimes ๐
It’s an important part of the repertoire, I think ๐
I’m finding it crops up a lot. Maybe I should be worried;
Love this
Thanks Claire ๐
I told Tim that photo deserved a story…this is a good one. (K)
Thanks ๐ That car looks as though it’s slowly being eaten up by vegetation.
Great unique voice, chilling image of these small things watching and waiting.
Thanks Iain. When you’re a fox, it’s the large things with guns that are chilling ๐
You have captured the death of a car but found that Mother Nature lets nothing just die. Well done. I love it. โบโบ
Thanks Patricia ๐ Even our senseless engines can be given another meaning by nature.
Great “voice” for “Us.”
Thank you, James. Us is pleased you liked it ๐
Really enjoyed this. Makes me want to read Watership Down again.
Now that is a good idea! Thanks for the suggestion ๐
Amazing story! It gave me goosebumps! It sounds like little animals were telling the story. Wonderful Jane! Welcome to the FFfAW challenge. We are happy you have joined us!
Thank you! I don’t know exactly how foxes speak, but I imagine it to be like this ๐
You did a great job of it! I have never heard them speak either but I imagine they would sound just like that! LOL!
Thanks again for the inspiration ๐
My pleasure!
Us is pleasured to read this, Jane. Your words is masterly smart. Us have much to be teached.
Us is right pleased to meet a kindred spirit ๐
Lovely just lovely – I did not see foxes but did see stoats and weasels – loved the voice.
I’m glad you liked it Michael. There isn’t anything unequivocally foxy in the story, which is why I put one in the title ๐
Pithy. I love it.
I’m pleased ๐
Since the picture isn’t scratch and sniff, Great job bringing it to life Jane. I grew up in Washington state and we had a forest similar to this close to our house. Yes there was a dampness, sour smell at times. Especially if there were rodents about. Additionally , it’s my understanding that foxes have quite a scent. Peace
Glad you like the atmosphere. Fox urine is strong-smelling, but I imagine we smell much stronger to them, of all the fear we induce.
Good point. I read a book about grizzlies years back, it stated that they detest human scent.
Most wild animals have every reason to stay far away from us.
Wonderful voice, as others have said. Knowing but not in a human way, in a way more in touch with the environment, with things of earth and green. Just love that image of the world saying ‘NO’. Truly love it
I’m glad you like the story Lynn. I have a soft spot for foxes and a very unsoft spot for hunters. I wish nature would say, no, more often.
The odd times I glimpse a fox in the early morning – we have plenty near us, skulking by the railway line – is always magical. There’s something fascinating about an animal that has been woven into mythology for hundreds of years but lives on our doorsteps. Really enjoyed this tale
Thanks Lynn. It’s hard to understand why country people can’t see the beauty of foxes. Okay, they steal chickens, but chickens are always locked up at night and it shouldn’t be beyond the wit of man to design a hen coop that can keep out a critter the size of a small dog.
You’d think, but foxes are pretty smart – and hens are very, very stupid
But foxes can’t pick locks, can they? Once a fox gets into a hen house, I know the hens go berserk. I imagine the fox digs underneath. Clever little buggers.
That they are ๐
Delightfully different! I really like the way you’ve written it. Excellent.
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Thank you Keith ๐
Great story and voice Jane ๐ Did the entire piece justice.
Thanks Pat. I’m glad it worked ๐
I love the narrators perspective. At first, I thought it was a mysterious Creature out of fantasy and then, I read the title again, I enjoyed it
Thank you! Foxes are mysterious creatures. I hate it that they are considered vermin almost everywhere.