The dverse prompt today is to rewrite a pop song in the style of a sonnet. I wasn’t going to do this as I’ve only ever written a couple of sonnets and don’t go much for pop songs. There are exceptions though, so here’s my attempt at one of them.
She couldn’t see what she had done so wrong,
Nor understand her parents’ cries to go,
A little thing, to make up such a song
And dance; movies, same sordid story show.
The innocent is beaten by the law,
Ghoulish crowds draw round in fascination
As blows rain down the morons watch in awe,
She leaves the cinema in desperation.
To ask the sky, she raises eyes to heaven,
If this is really how we’re meant to be,
Turns her back on hypocrites and cavemen,
And hopes she may find somewhere to be free.
She wonders if there’s life among the stars,
Perhaps on the red planet, life on Mars?
You’ve done Bowie proud, Jane! Love it!
It wasn’t hard to guess. I’m no good at enigmatic 🙂
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Love this! Oh, and congrats on being the focus from Day 12 – smiled when I saw your name on NaPo this morning!
Thank you Jilly! I thanked you for this comment last night but WP seems to have devoured it!
Maybe if we gave WP chocolate it wouldn’t be so hungry, huh? 🙂
Enjoying your poetic voice, Jane! Write on! Jilly
Thanks Jilly! Just try stopping me 🙂
Am not so into English pop song…so irrespective of that I think it’s a perfect interpretation…
Thank you Sangbad. A compliment indeed 🙂
I laughed so much at this because it was so on the mark!
The innocent is beaten by the law,
Ghoulish crowds draw round in fascination
As blows rain down the morons watch in awe,
This bit especially! So you really CAN do it all? Now for The Breakfast Club 2! 😉 (well done!)
Thanks Candice 🙂 Glad it pleased.
Love it! Great job! 🙂
Another one for the initiated 🙂
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Lovely wordsmithery and the tag gave it away for me 😉
I can’t keep secrets. Not that it would have fooled anyone who wasn’t a deaf mute throughout the 70s and 80s 🙂
True dat.
Definitely life on Mars Jane ~ Thanks for joining our pop sonnet challenge ~
It was certainly a challenge 🙂
Great sonnet, but Bowie never shook his booty for me. I wonder how the prompt went back in the day the first time around? Like you, I left out the thees & thous. I guess you’re not a Leonard Cohen fan. I was afraid I made mine too easy.
Nope, I’m not a Dylan fan either. In fact I’m a Bowie fan, period.
Well done! And I am a believer in life on other planets….how can we possibly be the only ones????
Thank you! I hope they think very carefully before they come and visit though.
Nice meter and rhyme in your sonnet. I just listened to Life on Mars. It’s the first time I’ve heard it so whatever I would have guessed would have been wrong.
Where have you been living, Frank???? Is there really a corner of the universe that hasn’t heard of Life on Mars??? I’m pleased to have brought it into your life 🙂
Oooh this is a well-written sonnet indeed! I think you did a great job, Jane 🙂
Sonnets is hard! Thanks Jade 🙂
I hear ya, Jane. I just posted mine and I don’t think I’ll be doing a sonnet again for some time lol
I’m leaving it to Shakespeare. He obviously loved them 🙂
Learning so much here. Very fun. Everyone else can hear these, but I can’t, but then this is EARLY Bowie. 😉
I haven’t got a single one of the allusions either. Not a big fan of pop music ever, but Bowie is special 🙂
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Thank you 🙂
Always with joy and greedy for information. 😉
The best way to be 🙂
Wow!
I am a child of the era of the magi Bowie days, this was brilliant, like the man himself whispered his intent to you.
I’m glad you like this 🙂 He was really the only rock artist I have much time for. He did it all. I don’t know why the others bother, they just fall so far short!
thats why I called his time the magic days. I played my cassette till it literally broke
Ha ha! That’s what happened to our Young Americans cassette. Instead of getting a CD husband replaced it with another cassette. He prefers the sound 🙂
I do too. more authentic. CD has a raspy sound.
The CD sound is so smooth it sometimes sounds like a completely different song.
like theres no soul in it dont you agree? cassettes give it some depth
True. The cassette sounds grittier. Live versions are powerful but the sound is often blurry and you get instrumentalists going off on an ego trip sometimes. Cassettes are between CD and live versions—raw but with the studio balance for the sound.
oh never thought it like that. yes thats a good observation.
I’m not a Bowie fan, so would never have recognized this, but your sonnet was a great read!
Thanks Beverly! That’s the main thing 🙂
Although I’m not a Bowie fan, I loved this sonnet!
Then I appreciate the compliment even more 🙂 Thank you, Bryan.
What a wonderful sonnet, Jane!
And I wanted to say I was SO excited to see you honored/featured at NaPoWriMo this past week! So well deserved! I am loving your work this month!
Thank you! I’m glad you liked the sonnet. It’s a form I find difficult to write. It was a real honour to be featured and I’m feeling pretty proud of myself 🙂
This one I got I love Bowie! Great job!
Thanks Bekkie! I’m not a fan of the sonnet form, but throw Bowie into the mix and ANYTHING would turn out wonderful 🙂
I didn’t think I was a fan of sonnets either but it’s similar to a form I write in when I rhyme anyway. I got to see Bowie during his Mysterious Moonlight Tour and it was fantastic! I miss him very much he had his fingers in everything! He was very handsome!
I saw him on that tour too! I’d just gone to live in Paris and my sister came over specially to come to the concert. He was a brilliant artist, and like you, I think he was so handsome. He looked as though he wasn’t going to stay long though.
You saw him in Paris? Wow! Sounds great!
It was scary. So many people, and like idiots we got right up front. Nearly died in the great surge forward when he came on stage.
Oh my! That can be very dangerous! I don’t blame you for being terrified.
I’ll know better next time 🙂