Poetry challenge: Golden dart of happiness

The five words of the Secret Keeper’s Monday word prompt are

| REACH | SHOT | INTENSE | FLAW | SPRING |

A powerful bunch of words to play with. Follow the link to add your poem to the entries.

The painting is actually called The Ninth Wave so I had to use it.

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Nine waves crash upon the strand,

In my ears the surf’s roar,

But still I cannot follow.

A shot at happiness darts bright,

Swift arrow flight,

Golden light,

Beyond the breakers towering.

Hands reach out to seize the wandering gull,

Circling, circling above the sea,

Deep and dark as my hopes.

White wings soar beyond the line,

And I am left behind,

In the intense, immense blue of the empty air,

Wondering will this flawed spring ever grow

To the bright summer of my dreams.

 

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Jane Dougherty

I used to do lots of things I didn't much enjoy. Now I am officially a writer. It's what I always wanted to be.

8 thoughts on “Poetry challenge: Golden dart of happiness”

  1. The sound of your words made me feel as though inside a storm. The Nine Waves, the roar, the chaos and sound of the gulls can be distracting but a familiar sound on the sea. Let us hope the flawed Spring brings high hopes for the dreams of summer to come into fruition. I’d say an upside down poem looking for optimism but without a feeling of certainty. Life testing strength and endurance while Waiting for Godot. Godot may not arrive but dreams are sure to be generous on some occasions. – jk

    1. Thank you! Power words for powerful emotions. The sea is ambivalent as far as I’m concerned. It can be soothing and familar with the constant motion of the waves, but it’s also deep and unpredictable and essentially indifferent. I kept your theme (or the theme inspired by your words) and wrote a series of triolets. So, a second thank you for the prompt words.

      Date: Sat, 27 Feb 2016 19:58:18 +0000 To: jane.dougherty@dbmail.com

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